Fic: Observations on Sentinels & Guides in Victorian London - Part One (PG-13)

[ryuuzakochou]

Title: Observations in Sentinels & Guides in Victorian London
Author: Ruuza Kochou
Pairing/Characters: Holmes/Watson
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 3389
Spoilers: None; complete AU
Summary: A Victorian era AU where Sentinels and Guides are members of everyday society. Starring Sentinel! Holmes and Guide! Watson. Part One, the pair come together in London....

Comments

[ends_of_time]

Does want more plzthnx

ZOMG

[ladylc21]

That was a great start! Sentinels + Sherlock Holmes = win ...and I love the Susan Foster universe. Can't wait for more.

[coolcia]

it's really interesting ;D

[korilian]

Interesting start. I do think you used to much exposition in your introduction, which is a problem I see a lot in sentinel fusions. When you need to set up a complex AU it's very tempting to quickly tell the audience what's going on, rather then showing them. A World filled with etiquette like Victorian London should have given you plenty of opportunities though. You could have shown us people's reactions when faced with a guide-less Holmes or his interactions with other Sentinels.
You've also given us a lot of irrelevant information (about Dark Sentinels and hierarchies). I'm sure it's going to be important later, but it could have waited until you could work it into the story more naturally (in a conversation for instance).

The part with Watson worked a lot better because he wasn't just sitting around pondering on his life, but already in the middle of an action. I found your explanation for people's aversion to Guides particularly inspired :).

[mothergoddamn]

Respectfully disagree, I have never heard of Sentinel/Guide fiction before and appreciated the exposition as well as enjoyed it. I like the flow, the character and descriptions.

[kichisama]

oh i hope to see more of this, and i hope holmes and watson find each other soon! <3