Comments | hollywithoutyou: one act play

hollywithoutyou

one act play

Oct 04, 2007 14:23

So the first assignment for my creative writing class is to write a one act play. So late night I wrote mine and brought it to class today for my peers to review it and whatever. But the two people I were working with didn't really give any feedback that could help me make it better. Since the final draft isn't due until monday and a lot of my lj ( Read more... )

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thevoicecalling October 4 2007, 21:53:40 UTC

It's pretty good, it kept my interest which is always a good sign. Being that it's supposed to be a play, I almost think it would be interesting if, rather than have him sit on his bed and recite the monologue, to have it acted out as a flashback. That way you'd get a few more characters, and it will be more interesting to watch because things will be happening. (Monologues, for example, are usually a lot shorter if they stay in the same spot ( ... )

hollywithoutyou October 4 2007, 22:12:45 UTC

thanks! that is really really helpful.
i would've made it a flash back and stuff, but we're only allowed to have 1-2 characters. so i couldn't really introduce any other characters like the dog, police officer, and father.

but i'll try elaborating more on his behavior and personality and stuff.
thankss