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When Paths Cross, Unbreakable Bonds Form, 1/?

Oct 13, 2011 15:39

Title: When Paths Cross, Unbreakable Bonds Form
Author: Hollie_1201
Pairing: Sinead & Aisling
Rating: PG
Summary: This is a story about how Sinead and Aisling met and what they have gone through to still be together.
Word Count: 3,631
Disclaimer: This is an original fiction using my own characters and ideas. Please do not use these characters ( Read more... )

fiction, ireland, sinead, romance, story, drama, beginning, aisling

Comments 14

irhotshit October 13 2011, 08:44:23 UTC

-squee-
love this fic already
beautifully written and could feel the emotions of it
i would like to slap Brooke in the face!
Yay for Aisling :]
and Sinead sounds adorable as a 12 year old!

MOARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!

humble beginnings ext_749987 October 13 2011, 11:48:59 UTC

hollie, i love this fic! Sinead was such an underdog back when and bullied too. i want to know how she grew into the cool criminal she is today. Aisling surely had much to do with that, i can see it already! i'll say it again, you write them so well. please continue! :)

anonymous October 13 2011, 21:54:13 UTC

Is it just my imagination, or is Brooke pretty much a young Caro?
Really enjoyed this, and now REALLY want to know how the two history nerds ended up as criminals!

- Dani otd

little_e_ October 13 2011, 23:35:31 UTC

Thank you for sharing your work. It's a sweet story, but it's not clear to me where you intend to go with it. Typically in a story, the main character has some sort of problem which motivates them to act, setting up the plot. Brooke is certainly a problem, but she's not motivating Sinead to *do* anything except cower and hide--which isn't much to read about. Someone who already knows and loves your characters may be perfectly happy reading a story about them puttering around at school, but as a new reader, I need something more. I want the main character to *do* something, to take some action against whatever trials and travails the world is throwing at her (she doesn't even have to be successful, at first ( ... )

ant1matter October 14 2011, 01:10:25 UTC

I do love me a good origin story.

This is really nice, Hollie. You do a really good job of setting up the friendship/later relationship between Sinead and Aisling. Now we just need to know how they came to lead a life of crime. ;D