HP: Coming Home (Susan Bones, Hannah/Susan, PG)

[holidayonice]

Title: Coming Home
Fandom: Harry Potter
Characters/Pairing: Susan Bones, Hannah/Susan
Rating: PG
Word Count: 1480

Summary: Susan realises that she can't run forever. This was a bit of an experiment, stylistically speaking! Lots of fun to write. :D

Comments

[frock]

Here's a stopgap comment: ♥ x 100000000000000!

[holidayonice]

Thank you. :x

[frock]

I'm aiming for coherency:

♥ the turquoise jacket, and now it's too small. :x
♥ Edgar's camera, Amelia's books, her grandparents' gramophone. I love your little details, I always do, but they're usually sensory details (which isn't a bad thing, and I love the sensory details in this, too) but these ones are so concrete and real. Hannah's apron, and apple crumble.
♥ I think I said last night, but I love Susan's travelling. Her refusal to die, and it's all twisty and contradictory, and ouch.
♥ The repetition of words! Cold, too cold; flat flat stomach. It makes Susan feel quite brittle, and always-moving. Which works, for obvious reasons.
♥ I'm scared all the time.
♥ Lack of quotation marks! I LOVE IT. I wish more people would style things like that.
♥ Your writing makes me HURT, and I love it for that.

It's gnarlabulous. >:D<

[holidayonice]

I think you achieved it!

About the details: a couple of them appeared in another (never posted) fic where Susan's going through all the stuff in her attic. When that failed I tried writing a fic where she finds Edgar's camera but then I got confused with all this stuff about f-stops and apertures when I tried to do research. In conclusion: I end up reusing stuff so much that it just becomes a part of my own personal canon. :))

I love fic with no quotation marks! I don't think it works with immediate, action-packed stories, but otherwise, yes. :D

Oh, that's the best compliment anyone's ever given me about my writing. :x (Hurt in a good way, I hope!)

ALSKDJFH I just choked on my drink. BEST MADE-UP WORD EVER. ♥

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[holidayonice]

Thank you! :">

[scariekitten]

For one that totally disregarded my favorite part of grammar (quotation marks!! every beta's wet dream!)i still have a remarkable amount of love for you. have an oreo of triumph.

[holidayonice]

Hee! Thank you very much. :D

[holyfant]

Oh my goodness, that was beautiful.

[holidayonice]

Thank you! ♥