Comments | holidayonice: HP: All The Things Susan Said (Hannah/Susan, PG-13)

holidayonice

HP: All The Things Susan Said (Hannah/Susan, PG-13)

Jan 01, 2007 01:01

Title: All The Things Susan Said
Fandom: Harry Potter
Pairing: Unrequited Hannah/Susan
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 1390

Summary: frock came up with the title and I sort of took it from there. I don't think either of us were expecting a serious fic to come out of it. :))

( All The Things Susan Said )

susan bones, hannah abbott, hannah/susan, femmeslash

Comments 22

frock January 1 2007, 01:45:45 UTC

It's even better the third time around. :x I am still in love with how you write little everyday scenes, the dialogue and gestures, they're just perfectly put together. ♥ You always manage to make me FEEL things with your fic, which is the ultimate, as far as I'm concerned! And as for your Hannah, well, she's just wonderful! Susan is spot on, just like she always is. :x

IN SHORT: I LOVE IT. :D

holidayonice January 3 2007, 13:34:24 UTC

♥! I really like writing these everyday scenes so I'm glad you like reading them! :">

softlyforgotten January 1 2007, 06:20:37 UTC

Mmmn, lovely, shiver-good. I love your Susan. :)

holidayonice January 3 2007, 13:30:19 UTC

Ooh, that is a compliment. :D

softlyforgotten January 3 2007, 13:35:51 UTC

:) ♥

bimupp January 1 2007, 11:16:37 UTC

Absolutely loved it, wonderfully executed:)

holidayonice January 3 2007, 13:30:29 UTC

Thank you! :)

Spot on! quimtessence January 3 2007, 05:05:57 UTC

One of the things I especially like in fan fiction is reading scenes detailing the everyday life of the characters, how they interact with the world at large in normal circumstances. This is also what I found appealing about your story ( ... )

Thank you! holidayonice January 3 2007, 13:44:53 UTC

Oh gosh, I'm blushing like a mad thing. Thank you for such a lovely comment!

How you feel about the angst... that's interesting. I think Hannah always knows that Susan will never feel the same way, and yet she can't help hoping - she wants to share a flat with her just because it's the closest she can get. She knows Justin and Susan are an item and she's jealous because, even though she knows she should be happy for her friend, she's only human. But I don't think she's very unhappy about it all - it's more a constant wistful longing for how things could have been. So in short, I suppose the reason why you didn't think the angst was very powerful is because it's not. I hope that doesn't sound like I'm making excuses, I'm just trying to justify Hannah's emotions. :)

Re: Thank you! quimtessence January 3 2007, 18:59:19 UTC

You're welcome and I'm glad you understand so fully the character you've crafted. My expectations, I think, arise more from this so-called hope every person still holds for unrequited love to turn into the opposite. The fact that it usually doesn't led me to believe there should have been more angst.

However, I can also understand the sort of person you've made Hannah out to be and how she's content (most times) with her friendship with Susan.

Cheers, Luciana.

pathology_doc January 4 2007, 11:55:18 UTC

I liked this very much, even if the last section took a leap of faith.

I would only question: Wordlessly, Susan swings her legs off the bed and gets up. She rummages around for clean clothes, then heads for the bathroom. Surely she'd go to the bathroom first and get changed behind the curtain around her bed? But that's just nitpickery.

holidayonice January 4 2007, 12:00:54 UTC

In the last section she's speaking platonically, but that's enough for Hannah.

I'd prefer to get changed in the bathroom after having a shower... I don't know how close the curtains are around the beds at Hogwarts (i.e. if there's any floor space to stand on) but I'd think it'd be a lot easier to get changed in the bathroom. I suppose it all comes down to personal preference, though. :-?