This is very raw. I'm not normally a fan of 2nd person POV but you do this very well and it works nicely for me. Nice details, like Tosh's specs, in the memorial scene. I like the coda to this, with the switch to the 3rd person and the "reveal" as to who it was that went out the night before. Though, given the clues you gave in the first part, not that big a surprise. Still nice and I like the way Jack questions Ianto and how Ianto answers. very nice.
2nd person is difficult, but I wanted it to be a little bit nebulous. Of course, anyone that's read stuff I wrote will easily guess that it's Ianto going out, but maybe some will be a bit more up in the air, since that was the idea- it could have easily been any of the three survivors.
I wanted Owen and Tosh to have a memorial, and the benches seemed like a good idea, along with mementos that each of the survivors most closely identify them with. I wonder how many people caught Gwen's remembering Tosh mostly through her connection to Owen.
Oh well, I couldn't fool you with leather to think it might be Jack, or skin tight to think it was Gwen...
I really did think about having it be Gwen, but then I remembered that she is always Miss ID and it wouldn't have the same impact as Ianto-the-Super Ego cutting loose.
We were dealing with the ID, which purely instinct driven and out for pleasure (or release) and we never see Ianto as a slave to his ID. If anything, he's the archetype for the Super-ego, the self-regulator of all desires.
Kind of like putting a lid on a volcano, sometimes you have to release the pressure.
Ianto and Jack's interaction was supposed to be sad (glad that came through) since I was trying to make it clear that Ianto was literally at the breaking point where his ID would have broken through and he wouldn't want that, not when he needed to get through the memorial.
this is really good and insightful (is that the correct word?) So Ianto to recognise the raw need to reduce the pressure. Even though these things are all mind and spirit, the workings of this story are comparing to mechanics.. Th really sad bit in this is the fact that Jack cannot help him in this. But a good story, very close to home...
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I wanted Owen and Tosh to have a memorial, and the benches seemed like a good idea, along with mementos that each of the survivors most closely identify them with. I wonder how many people caught Gwen's remembering Tosh mostly through her connection to Owen.
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I really did think about having it be Gwen, but then I remembered that she is always Miss ID and it wouldn't have the same impact as Ianto-the-Super Ego cutting loose.
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We were dealing with the ID, which purely instinct driven and out for pleasure (or release) and we never see Ianto as a slave to his ID. If anything, he's the archetype for the Super-ego, the self-regulator of all desires.
Kind of like putting a lid on a volcano, sometimes you have to release the pressure.
Ianto and Jack's interaction was supposed to be sad (glad that came through) since I was trying to make it clear that Ianto was literally at the breaking point where his ID would have broken through and he wouldn't want that, not when he needed to get through the memorial.
So he released the pressure valve.
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Th really sad bit in this is the fact that Jack cannot help him in this.
But a good story, very close to home...
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