FIC: Once Upon an Unspeakable Spin (PG-13)

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Title: Once

Comments

[iulia_linnea]

The in medias res technique is a favorite of mine, and it works well here; I completely understand why Severus reacts to this time-stream's Lily the way he does.

[hh_prefect]

Obviously, I like it, too, and I'm glad it works for you. Thank you for commenting!

[slumber]

Ooh, wow, this was so surreal and creepy. And I love the way it ended, too! Well done! :)

[hh_prefect]

Thank you so much! I was going for creepy. :)

[leni_jess]

Ow! ow! ow! This is going to take one hell of a lot of resolving - if it can ever be done. A job for the Unspeakables, if any of them survive to get back to the lab/office/desk!

[hh_prefect]

I agree; thank you for your comment!

[loopily]

An interesting plot, I must say. I enjoyed the character interactions between Severus and Hermione although I think a bit more background as to how they got into such a familiar working relationship would have been nice, as well as perhaps a more in-depth look as to the changes in the alternate universe as things like Alt!Hermione's Dark Mark and Lily's response to Harry's repeated death were a bit confusing. I think Severus' reaction to Lily was especially well done here.

Overall, it was quite a well done short, especially characterisation-wise. Thanks for an enjoyable read.

[hh_prefect]

I really wanted to drop people right into the action, so I'm glad that you found the plot interesting, and Severus' reaction to Lily well done in spite of what you didn't see. Thank you for commenting!

squeee

[cabepfir]

YAY to the beginning of posting! And for a Snape/Granger (in premises), to boot!

This is quite claustrophobic, actually. Lily and Mrs Potter are totally creepy, and well, Snape must have been ten times more shocked than Hermione. Being lost in time doesn't sound so pleasing!

Re: squeee

[hh_prefect]

I'm excited about the fest, too! I'm glad Iuls was impatient. :)

Claustrophobic-that's a cool way to describe the mood! Thank you so much for commenting!

Re: squeee

[cabepfir]

One minor question - how could she possibly be Mrs. Potter? Shouldn't she be Mrs. Sirius Snape? [of course, that would have confused the readers even more, and you needed to tell who was Harry in all of this.) Or did Snape marry Lily after Potter's death, in the alterreality?

Re: squeee

[hh_prefect]

Not to take away from anyone else's ideas as they read the fic, but to my mind, Lily was married to James, with whom she had Harry and Sirius Charlus (although which son is older I couldn't say), and she married Severus after James' death. I'll leave the rest of the details to your imagination. :)