New Czech Classic: Challenge 7, Remix

[early_afternoon]

Title: New Czech Classic
Pairing: Dominik Hasek/Martin Prusek
Rating: R
Disclaimer: Lies

Remix of the lovely Anna's New American Classic. Please go read it. Many many thanks also to Anna for looking this over for me and letting me attempt to remix it at all.

Comments

[annapeace]

I still say that the Nik not-even-cameo-cameo is awesome.

but has that ever worked in the long history of I-shouldn’ts and you-can-nevers?

And this line. ♥

[early_afternoon]

That's because Khabi is quite awesome, even when he doesn't appear in fic. He enhances it!

Aww, thank you. I'm glad you liked that line, and the fic. Thank you so much for letting me remix it, Anna banana!

[bkm5191]

Finally he is down to the crusts of his bread and the classifieds of the newspaper, an excellent description of stalling!

“You have several guys from New York on here,” she says disapprovingly. “I don’t like New York, you know that.”

I like how it is an excuse to find out a good place to live with maybe some charity thrown in.

“Martin Havlat, Martin Prusek. Who is Prusek, again?” she asks.

I like how both these fics had a totally different tone, Anna's was sort of magic realisim and yours is more straight forward and matter of fact which means getting a happy ending (of a sort, a hopeful happy ending) is so very sweet.

Dominik pastes a smile on his face and goes over to greet Martin Prusek. I like this, because it's normal and a fake smile to meet the person who will change your life amuses me.

“I don’t want hero worship from you,”

I think that is something that really needs to be said n a lot of fics, I know it was a thread in beautiful child, umm what is that universe called now?

Martin says simply, still easily,

[early_afternoon]

Thank you!

Usually in fic it's easier to ignore the wives, you know, but sometimes it's important, you know? Like, Anna had already brought in both wives as characters because the story itself is not just "two guys fall in love" as it is "two lives change," and that brings along with it changes for your family as well. Plus, Prusek's wife is a pretty nice lady anyway.

The cell-phone bit is also one of my favorites.

*snerk* "See? I could be SO MUCH WORSE! See how lucky you are!"

Thank you for the lovely fb, and the challenge itself.

[leici]

I really like the descriptors you use for things. Lines like:

He kneels down to tie his shoe, noticing the ever-present twinge in his groin, and when he looks up again the double doors are swinging and admitting an early-summer breeze.

and

He smiles, and Martin Prusek looks back at him with blue eyes like wide glass marbles.

They both really describe something fairly mundane in a way that's much more pleasing to read.

These two lines, by the way, are completely fabulous:

Low-key nights are much more understandable for two goalies--strange people already--whose anxiety meters are already calibrated on a scale most normal people can’t even imagine. Dominik in particular doesn’t like to think of himself as particular twitchy, especially after having met Nikolai Khabibulin and wanting to take a Xanax for him, but he realizes uncomfortably that it’s too late to change.I really love how all of this works together, an understated telling of a complicated love story. I like how things don't need to be concrete descriptions to be

[early_afternoon]

Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it! Your fb is very flattering.

Thank you!