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hlbr

The usual (promises broken and the like)

Mar 31, 2009 22:35

So--not doing anything that I should, this week. I even skipped class (twice). We can pretend I said the 'idk what's happening to me' speech and you can pretend to be understanding ( Read more... )

fanfic, neg, jaff

Comments 6

tulina April 1 2009, 13:01:15 UTC

...what does 'not exactly' mean???

Anyway. This is TOTALLY SQUEEEEEEEEFULL. It makes me giggly and happy, and I'm glad you posted it! :D

hlbr April 1 2009, 20:45:46 UTC

Thanks! I'm glad it made you giggly! I was glad you encouraged me to add the more--uhm--sensuality related parts, because I tend to try to ignore it, and I have to learn at some point.

But see, this is what happens when I don't have you looking over my shoulder: I'm terrible at endings. Complete cop-out.

Honestly I didn't know how to follow it up, and I was tired of it because it was not the path that I wanted it to go. I wanted it to be about Darcy, and his troubles with accepting his attraction--and what that attraction may mean for him, personally, and in the larger scheme of things with his relationship with E. But, as I said, complicated subject.

jeannineinsd April 1 2009, 19:28:29 UTC

I loved this! I'm glad you posted it, too.

I'm especially fond of this: "Still today, I do not know how it began, or how I followed the path not knowing where I was going".

Thanks so much.

Jeannine

hlbr April 1 2009, 20:48:40 UTC

I'm very glad you liked it! Thanks for leaving a comment.

It makes me feel less self serving for posting something on a whim--non betaed and sort of pointless.

I like the phrase, somewhat, too, but I'm angry with that part of the short: that's where I (or/and Darcy!) coped out of analysing how the situation made him feel.

But anyway, no problem! I really enjoy sharing stories.

... elizabeth_hoot April 3 2009, 03:52:56 UTC

My eyebrows actually shot up as I read this, but thankfully, it wasn't remotely along the lines of the screamingly hilarious scenes one *usually* finds it.

The sensual side worked rather well. It was . . . well, mostly hinted at, but not -- er, light. You know? Not explicit but not coy either. I wasn't sure what you were getting at with the rest - I mean, I thought you wanted to address the gender/sexuality issues involved with a very heterosexual man falling in love with a man who, while biologically female, was regarded by himself and the narrative itself as a man, and who will always be so, to at least some extent. But you kind of evaded that, too, so I was a little perplexed.

Re: ... hlbr April 3 2009, 05:18:47 UTC

Oh, yes, so on the spot. I totally evaded it. It's--I think I'm still getting used to this having a journal thing, because I'm starting to post every (or almost every) bit of fiction I write and it's not a good idea.

I always evade the hard issues in the first version. And often in the second and the third. I don't know what's going on with the characters, and I can't figure it out before, unlike with the normal, regular scenes. It's--I know what I want him to think, and I know what I don't want him to think... it's just difficult to know if that is what he would think ( ... )