fic. of sorts. *hides*

[hkath]

Title: Steak Tartar (or How Jack Got His Sea Legs)
Pairing: ...is there any other?
Rating: R-ish.
Synopsis: Rescue is not as instantaneous as you might think.
Wordcount: 2,652 (ohgod)
Prompt: fanfic100 014. Green.
Caution: OK, um. Don't read this if you're afraid of vomit. Or intensely bothered by mentions of insects. Um. Stop looking at me like that.

Comments

[halfdutch]

Not only was this an utterly fantastic and delightful fic based on my prompt, it fits foxxcub's perfectly too! *cue Twilight Zone theme*

But then again, a hot and sweet Jack/Sawyer fic with some snark and a sizzling kiss in it -- who wouldn't love that?

And awww for the Shannon ref.

Thank you! I'm so glad you finished this one!

*loves*

[hkath]

Not only was this an utterly fantastic and delightful fic based on my prompt, it fits foxxcub's perfectly too! *cue Twilight Zone theme*

Yeah, boykissing. Sure is hard to fit that in ;)

So glad you liked it!

[halfdutch]

Hee! But it was such a delicious kiss, and the whole fic built up to it. I left you woefully inadequate fb about how much I loved it! Seriously, just wonderful, the whole feeling of uncertainty and being in limbo -- and then that lovely scene, starting with Sawyer handing him the toothbrush. I love your choice of rescue vehicle as well!

And did I mention the kiss? And the naked steak? ;)

[hkath]

OK, that's it.

*smooches you like she means it*

:D

[eponine119]

I am kind of in love with this story.

You have the most amazing writing style, word choice, voice. It's completely unique. And it's here in spades, from the beginning -- funny and sad -- their regret that Shannon never lived to see their rescue by purses and shoes.

And it winds its way through, keeping the thoughtful moments from getting too heavy, like when Jack gets the impression Sawyer hasn't spoken to anyone in days. That's such a deep, fascinating idea, and here it sinks in and does its job perhaps even better because Sawyer's using words like "kooky" and proclaiming he's going to eat steak naked.

[hkath]

Wow. Thank you! :)

The naked steak thing cracks me up, because it just popped up in here. It's from something I wrote a long time ago that was just too insane to finish :D

[arabella_hope]

And then Jack, Chris, and Kenny had a threesome!

Ok, EWWW, no.

They only like to watch.

There is so much poignancy in Jack being the only one affected - alone again - while the other survivors huddle together. And you show us Sawyer so well through Jack's eyes, just Sawyer doing 'normal' things like reading, but right there by him and going to the bathroom right as Jack is sick, but you don't give anything away because the uncertainty that Jack has is so perfectly expressed.

And for the first time, the rocking of the ship makes sense, falls into a flawless rhythm with the waves of pleasure pulsing through him. Just one line, at the pivotal moment and wham! It all comes together and LOOK how good you are. Plus, the "How Long?/Too Long." is so open and interpretable.

Okay, so...can you tell I love this for real? Am I just being scary now?

Fine. I'll be in the sink with my new buds, waiting for those men to show up again and give us a free show! ;)

[hkath]

Okay, so...can you tell I love this for real? Am I just being scary now?

Scary *now*? Hon, you were being scary when you named the bugs! :D

I do so love your scary self, though. *hugstight*

[cmonkatiekatie]

He looks down at them and wonders how this human knot will untangle itself when they reach dry land. How they’re going to go their separate ways and pretend they’re not part of a symbiotic relationship. Maybe Jack should be counting his lucky stars. No such heartbreak in his future. Not even with Kate, much as he would like there to be something between them. Something beyond a vague acknowledgement of their respective genders whenever they’re together.

yep, I just quoted an entire paragraph. And there's so much about this entire thing that stuck me I don't really know where to start. Your phrasing is remarkable. Each sentence is just, I don't know, interesting without being inaccessible. I must sound like a moron, but I loved every bit of this.

And Jack not noticing when Sawyer came, thats sheer brilliance, and people so rarely write about how selfish sex is, so good for you!

[hkath]

Glad you enjoyed! No you do not sound like a moron :P and I think it's awesome that you liked Jack being oblivious. :D

[astra2104]

Oh god, this was...is...amazing. I sterated reading and expected funny, and then you hit me with this No one says anything, but Jack is sure they’re all thinking the same thing: it’s a damn shame that Shannon never lived to see it. and I'm all teary and nostalgic til you mention the cockroaches; and this paragraph
“You gonna brush those teeth?”

“I…”

“Cause I sort of intend to kiss you… you know, in the next couple of minutes.”

“Oh.”

“And you kinda smell like stomach right now.”

“Oh.” Jack thinks he might still be reacting to that first thing, the kiss thing. He thinks he could say, “Oh,” a few more dozen times before he was done.
This might just be the most wonderful prelude to a kiss I've ever read.
*worships you shamelessly*

[hkath]

That dialogue was the first thing that popped into my head and the entire reason the fic got written, so I love that you picked it out. Thanks for your nice words! Glad you liked it :)