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ginevrawp in hg_silverlining

Fic: A second

Aug 11, 2009 02:25

It’s all clumsiness and last minute doubts before giving into the frantic search of the other, the swinging of hips, the desperate need to make sure that this kiss is saying all they can’t say as they give into their bodies deepest need and soon they are both crying and rocking each other and they are tears of joy, of knowing they can devote ( Read more... )

harry/ginny, fanfiction, fic

Comments 21

danfan74 August 11 2009, 21:53:10 UTC

Brilliant. Brilliant moments. I, too, have read that other story you mentioned in one of your comments. Yours has a poignancy to it because it moves into the future.

ginevrawp August 11 2009, 23:01:26 UTC

Oh, I'm afraid I'm not quite getting which story you are referring to :/
AS for the melancholy feel this piece has to the end, well, I kind of see it as the bittersweet feel of seeing his children grow, and how time cheated on Ginny and him, how nineteen years went by in "a second". How great it's been to live in a loving home, how weird it will be to let his children lead lives of their own. Hopefully, a bit of that came through.
Thanks so much for your comment!! :)

only_for_one August 12 2009, 00:58:24 UTC

This was really good. LOVED this line: As she takes James in her arms Ginny smiles, for she knows this is the second time he’s given her life. Great work!

ginevrawp August 12 2009, 01:01:57 UTC

Aww, thank you so much! I think every paragraph has one defining sentence and that's the phrase I had in mind when first writing about James coming to the world. I'm thrilled you liked it!! :)

katwoman_68 August 12 2009, 02:35:05 UTC

This was just beautiful!

ginevrawp August 12 2009, 02:50:08 UTC

Thanks!! So glad thay you thought so :)

flyingcarpet August 12 2009, 14:10:02 UTC

Oooh, I love this. Such a great use of the prompt and the whole theme of segments of time and the way it passes for Harry and Ginny. I especially loved the first part, the contrast of the second it took for him to kiss her and the way it felt like several sunlit days. :)

ginevrawp August 12 2009, 19:42:54 UTC

Oh, thank you so much for your words. I knew from the start that I'd be going down this path of segments, focusing on how even though each of these moments cover an important period of time, the realisation and appreciation of it Harry makes takes just a second. Once again, thank you for putting this challenge together and thus urging me to write again. <3

mollywheezy August 12 2009, 22:13:09 UTC

I loved how you used a series of drabbles linked together by the prompt. Very well done! And your poem is beautiful in both languages. :)

ginevrawp August 12 2009, 23:16:18 UTC

The drabble part was semi accidental, as I doubted my ability to be concise and stick to the 100 words. But as soon as I started my fisrt draft every part was roughly a hundred so I decided this was actually a challenge so I should take a chance. It took many rewritings for every paragraph to fit the drabble form but I'm glad I did it as I think it sets a nice pace and marks the passage of time in a nice way.
And you noticed my poem, and liked it even!! Thank you so much for you wonderful, kind review!