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Song Lyric Challenge Fic: "Twin Pillars" (PG-13)

Jul 27, 2009 23:45

Title: Twin Pillars
Pen Name: tosca1390
Characters/Pairing: Harry/Ginny
Word Count: 2,550 words
Rating: PG-13
Genre: Romance, I suppose.
Summary: His life was parchment and ink and publicity stunts, and it wasn’t exactly what he’d thought it would be.
Song Lyrics:
Tonight you arrested my mind when you came to my defense ( Read more... )

fic challenge, harry/ginny, fic

Comments 21

lyras July 28 2009, 04:36:42 UTC

Aw, gorgeous! I love the way you bring it back to the bedroom at the end of each scene, but keep things subtle - the switch is perfectly balanced. Your descriptions are so vivid, as well. I especially liked the description of Harry watching Ginny at the beginning.

tosca1390 July 28 2009, 04:43:35 UTC

Thank you! I feel so good to have it done, especially since (as you know, being on my flist) it hated me for soooo long.

Glad you liked it!

pluschi July 28 2009, 07:55:22 UTC

Beautiful! I love their dialogue. It's got this kind of maturity that's still very them. Also, you kept them really well in character - Harry, though happy, is still a bit moody and Ginny still rocks and teases. They're very balanced and sure of each other - I love that.

Tough lyrics though!

tosca1390 July 28 2009, 13:14:56 UTC

Thanks very much! I'm glad you liked it!

mhersheybar July 28 2009, 11:29:58 UTC

You did a really good job with some really tough lyrics - I had no idea how you were going to go with this. One thing I especially liked is that you gave a real, understandable reason for all of Harry's paperwork. I read so many stories that use paperwork as a plot device for making Harry bored at work but most of them just leave it at that - Harry's miserable, end of story.

Here, the back and forth with Ginny and the realism of their conversations, his reactions, and their eventual resolution were lovely to read. I could "see" the glow of light in the flat and imagine them curled up on the big red chair. Great job.

tosca1390 July 28 2009, 13:16:15 UTC

Thank you very much!

dukebrymin July 28 2009, 14:12:41 UTC

Gorgeous, simply perfect. The parallels between Harry's life and Ginny's life are very well-done, understated, but quite firm in showing that the two are definitely equal to each other.
Thanks!

tosca1390 July 29 2009, 00:14:31 UTC

Thank you very much for commenting! Glad you enjoyed it.

emmacmf July 28 2009, 20:30:02 UTC

Utterly fantastic, and your lovely, independent and firey Ginny is the prefect match for Harry.

Loved it.

tosca1390 July 29 2009, 00:14:52 UTC

Thanks so much! :)