Red Fall: 20/?
anonymous
June 29 2009, 03:07:44 UTC
Toris compulsively kneaded his hands, his mind flickering back to dinner. It had taken both of his brothers to calm him, and even then it had taken nearly half-an-hour.
He didn’t used to be like this.
He used to be able to handle life with Ivan; the constant mental barrage, the violent beatings paired with gentle touches, complete isolation for weeks at a time; he’d made it through it all, his tears having run dry after only a few days. Then why-why was this any different?
Because it was America.
The ‘Land of the Free’ and ‘The Home of the Brave,’ the country that always leant a helping hand, that built up its own enemies so they could be free too. The Lithuanian felt his hands involuntary clench.
Weren’t he and his brothers enough to push around? No; he was never satisfied, not until he got exactly what he wanted, not a breath less
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OP IS SPEECHLESS
anonymous
June 30 2009, 02:33:09 UTC
HOLY FUCKING SHIT WORLD DOMINATION HAS NEVER BEEN SEXIER i totally didn't expect this lol even though it's so heart breaking (omg poor Liet) but Alfred seems so happy especially when Russia called him Alfred for the first time. To think Russia and America against the rest of the world is ... kinda scary/awesome.
A-Anon ILU for this and THANKYOUTHANKYOU FOR FILLING MY REQUEST >.< you surpassed my expectations and blown me away every time you update. And you updated everyday. HOW DO YOU DO THIS?
and I would LOVE LOVE LOVEEE that sequel!! Cause that ending is ... soo cruel D: WHAT DOES THIS DOGTAG IT MEAN!?!?! What happen to Liet's eye?? WHAT WILL HAPPEN TO ALFRED?
Re: Red Fall: 25/25
anonymous
June 30 2009, 02:45:48 UTC
as a fellow hopeful writer I have to say that this really impressed me (and I'm something of a literary snob, so that usually is quite hard to do) - there were only a few things here and there I found worthy of critique, but unless you'd like I won't mar this compliment with tiny critical details. Really, I love what you did with the amnesia bit (and that usually is something of a overused trope that I cringe when I see, but you used it so WELL that it worked perfectly), and Alfred calling Ivan "mother" was an incredibly creepy/evocative touch. I also must say I'm very fond of your shy!Al, and loved the bit with Arthur (authorial voice sounded very much like him). Keep up the great work!
Also Wants to Do A Comic...
anonymous
June 30 2009, 05:17:34 UTC
And this NEEDS a sequel, pleasepleaseplease!
God, I stayed up till 1:15 AM reading this. o.o This story just grabbed me and refused to let go. I'm so happy it was finished by the time I got to the end. And what an ending! I thought I was a great writer until I got to this story...the loss of sleep was definitely more than worth it.
I beg you, do a sequel. I will happily add my soul to your collection as well as fanart.
(reCaptcha says manilas $200,000. Does it want me to send you money...?)
Re: Red Fall: 25/25
anonymous
June 30 2009, 16:06:39 UTC
That was intense, man!(or woman)D: I loved the declarations of war! America and Russia working together would probably be the the most frightening thing EVER. I have to agree with everyone else, DO A SEQUEL!!! I want to know how Alfred will react to his memories, if Ivan will continue to surpress them or if the Baltics still have a microscopic shred of hope. What happened to the invaded countries, were they brainwashed or killed? Answer these in your sequel, if you do I'll give you my glasses. (If you don't need them, give them back I only have one pair.)
Not only do you want me to do a sequel, but I have two people who want to do art?
*squeals* OMGWTFBBQ
Well then, given that every seems to agree, I'd be more than happy to do a sequel. <3 The first part won't be up until Thursday, due to the fact I won't have internet tommorrow, or at the very latest Friday. Just check the fill page on either of those days.
Also, while I'm starting an internship, I'll still attempt to update daily, or at least bi-daily for you guys. Because you're awesome (like Prussia)! :D
...And how did you guys know that I was a sucker for art? ;^;
OP has never been happier!!!
anonymous
June 30 2009, 20:07:57 UTC
YAY I CAN'T WAIT FOR IT! OMG goodluck/have fun with your internship! I actually need to find one for myself D:
BUT HOLY CRAP 3 people, including me, want to do art for this? I-is this a first on this meme?? You guys fucking ROCK! I'd love to see these if you guys ever do draw them :D
A-Anon here, again~
anonymous
July 1 2009, 03:59:18 UTC
I'm not sure how to do that, actually. ^^; I don't have a LJ. But if you want to talk to me or about my work (which I certainly wouldn't mind :3 ), then just send something to my 'anon' e-mail: aslywriter@yahoo.com.
This account is my own, but still keeps me as a 'anon' as the rules request.
This also goes for anyone else as well. :)
On a different note, I'm delighted you like it. <3
He didn’t used to be like this.
He used to be able to handle life with Ivan; the constant mental barrage, the violent beatings paired with gentle touches, complete isolation for weeks at a time; he’d made it through it all, his tears having run dry after only a few days. Then why-why was this any different?
Because it was America.
The ‘Land of the Free’ and ‘The Home of the Brave,’ the country that always leant a helping hand, that built up its own enemies so they could be free too. The Lithuanian felt his hands involuntary clench.
Weren’t he and his brothers enough to push around? No; he was never satisfied, not until he got exactly what he wanted, not a breath less ( ... )
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WORLD DOMINATION HAS NEVER BEEN SEXIER i totally didn't expect this lol
even though it's so heart breaking (omg poor Liet) but Alfred seems so happy especially when Russia called him Alfred for the first time. To think Russia and America against the rest of the world is ... kinda scary/awesome.
A-Anon ILU for this and THANKYOUTHANKYOU FOR FILLING MY REQUEST >.< you surpassed my expectations and blown me away every time you update. And you updated everyday. HOW DO YOU DO THIS?
and I would LOVE LOVE LOVEEE that sequel!! Cause that ending is ... soo cruel D: WHAT DOES THIS DOGTAG IT MEAN!?!?! What happen to Liet's eye?? WHAT WILL HAPPEN TO ALFRED?
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I just realized ... of all the things that would get Alfred to remember is a dogtag of one of his people. DAMN THAT IS GENIUS
btw OP is interested in drawing this whole story out AND the sequel too if you do plan on writing it!! Drawing as in a comic :D
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I think a sequel would be absolutely lovely~
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God, I stayed up till 1:15 AM reading this. o.o This story just grabbed me and refused to let go. I'm so happy it was finished by the time I got to the end. And what an ending! I thought I was a great writer until I got to this story...the loss of sleep was definitely more than worth it.
I beg you, do a sequel. I will happily add my soul to your collection as well as fanart.
(reCaptcha says manilas $200,000. Does it want me to send you money...?)
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There are no other words for it.
SEQUELPLEEEAAAAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSSSSSEEEEEEEEEEE!
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I loved the declarations of war! America and Russia working together would probably be the the most frightening thing EVER.
I have to agree with everyone else, DO A SEQUEL!!!
I want to know how Alfred will react to his memories, if Ivan will continue to surpress them or if the Baltics still have a microscopic shred of hope.
What happened to the invaded countries, were they brainwashed or killed?
Answer these in your sequel, if you do I'll give you my glasses.
(If you don't need them, give them back I only have one pair.)
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Not only do you want me to do a sequel, but I have two people who want to do art?
*squeals* OMGWTFBBQ
Well then, given that every seems to agree, I'd be more than happy to do a sequel. <3 The first part won't be up until Thursday, due to the fact I won't have internet tommorrow, or at the very latest Friday. Just check the fill page on either of those days.
Also, while I'm starting an internship, I'll still attempt to update daily, or at least bi-daily for you guys. Because you're awesome (like Prussia)! :D
...And how did you guys know that I was a sucker for art? ;^;
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OMG goodluck/have fun with your internship! I actually need to find one for myself D:
BUT HOLY CRAP 3 people, including me, want to do art for this? I-is this a first on this meme?? You guys fucking ROCK! I'd love to see these if you guys ever do draw them :D
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OH PLEASE TELL ME YOU'RE UNANONING. OH PLEASE. OH JESUS CHRIST PLEASE...
My heart. oh god. my soul.
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This account is my own, but still keeps me as a 'anon' as the rules request.
This also goes for anyone else as well. :)
On a different note, I'm delighted you like it. <3
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