Re: Redcoat (2/?)
anonymous
July 16 2009, 20:54:44 UTC
“W-wh...” England sputtered, his mind shutting down. America was shirtless, wearing only a pair of loose trousers. His little boy, his darling colony...His enemy, his rebellious child
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Re: Redcoat (3/?)
anonymous
July 16 2009, 20:57:37 UTC
“You take your role-playing too seriously, old man,” America laughed as he stripped the older Nation, “You need to loosen up! Or get into your sexy butler outfit. Yeah, that would be awesome!”
“What the hell are you babbling about?!”
“Or your pirate costume!” America chirped, oblivious, “Oh man, when you're after booty...best sex ever!”
“Sex?!” England gasped, his head spinning, “B-but I raised you! You're like my son!”
“Not for the past two hundred years!” America grinned, stripping off England's coat, “Man, I love independence. And your ass.”
“You horny git!” England yelped as one of America's hands squeezed his buttocks, “What are you, part French?!”
“Mmm, yeah,” America laughed, as he sucked on England's neck, leaving a hickey, “Parts of me used to belong to France, remember?”
“Since when?!” England shrieked, just as America slid off England's shirt.
America paused as soon as England's torso was revealed.
“Give me back my clothes, now,” England demanded imperiously, fighting down the blush. This was not happening. It was
( ... )
wow never thought my request would be filled so quickly! Thanks author!anon, I really enjoyed this fill, especially when America started to babble like an idiot when he understood that England is from the past xD
Re: Redcoat (4/4)
anonymous
July 16 2009, 21:47:51 UTC
Oh! Oh anon that was just lovely! ;A; I love America is completely oblivious til the end and how England longs for his little colony to come back to him! T_T This...this was just the best!
Re: Redcoat (4/4)
anonymous
July 16 2009, 22:42:34 UTC
Gorgeous stuff. I love the descriptions of America through redcoat-England's eyes - and how he keeps being shocked. The last bit, right before America kisses him? nfisafhofhf SO HOT.
And I think I love how you handled the time-travel/paradox thing. Neat, well-thought out, I love that England-future remembers it. And I love wondering at what point England realized it hadn't been a dream, but a glimpse of the future. It'd be hilarious if he was like, "America is a jerk now but he totally thinks I'm sex on legs later. YES."
Re: Redcoat (Epilogue)
anonymous
July 17 2009, 00:25:41 UTC
Author!Annon blames you for giving me a good idea for an Epilogue. Cause Author!Annon agrees. When does England figure out that what he really was a glimpse of the future
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Re: Redcoat (Epilogue)
anonymous
July 17 2009, 00:31:13 UTC
Oh author-anon. That was beautiful. I really do love your language, and how you tied the future together with the past.
...heee. This was gorgeous, but I love imagining the more hilarious side of things - like how your England was serious and poignant and your America was hilarious until he realized who it was.
So that's why England keeps trying with America. I imagine at some point he remembers that America apparently thinks pirate-him is 'the best sex ever'. And dresses accordingly.
Re: Redcoat (Epilogue)
anonymous
July 17 2009, 01:17:06 UTC
I don't really read much US/UK at all, but this was simply precious, anon. Mostly for England and his heartbreak, and America and his sweetness and ugh. I liked it very much ♥
Re: Redcoat (Epilogue)
anonymous
July 17 2009, 03:32:17 UTC
Another anon who is not particularly interested in US/UK...
THIS IS BRILLIANT. Yes, even though I am not a big fan of this pairing (well, I don't hate US/UK, just indifferent), I LOVE THIS FIC. Especially the epilogue; I like how you incorporate canon into this.
“Man, I love independence. And your ass.” THIS IS WIN.
Rant+ Translation request
anonymous
February 7 2011, 20:31:15 UTC
Oh Author!Anon you are amazing. I've read and re-read this for so many time over the past few weeks, and everytime I feel like I notice more little details to this piece. For one, I REALLY like the note this piece ended on, with England wishing that the future he sees is real, because (in my headcanon) for him losing America was so much more than just losing power over a colony. His protective love for young America I think is very well-conveyed here, and the glimpse of Revolutionary!US we see kind of solidifies it for me that both of them at this point feel more a brotherly/family bond towards each other.
This is nicely contrasted with the future America's kind words, and how lovey-dovey comfortable he is with expressing is feelings with UK. I don't know how you do it, but even though we don't really know how their feelings exactly evolved, I can feel the sheer scope of things that they've been through to be their presentday!selves and I really love this bit about your piece! I think you nailed both their characterisation for me,
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“What the hell are you babbling about?!”
“Or your pirate costume!” America chirped, oblivious, “Oh man, when you're after booty...best sex ever!”
“Sex?!” England gasped, his head spinning, “B-but I raised you! You're like my son!”
“Not for the past two hundred years!” America grinned, stripping off England's coat, “Man, I love independence. And your ass.”
“You horny git!” England yelped as one of America's hands squeezed his buttocks, “What are you, part French?!”
“Mmm, yeah,” America laughed, as he sucked on England's neck, leaving a hickey, “Parts of me used to belong to France, remember?”
“Since when?!” England shrieked, just as America slid off England's shirt.
America paused as soon as England's torso was revealed.
“Give me back my clothes, now,” England demanded imperiously, fighting down the blush. This was not happening. It was ( ... )
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And I think I love how you handled the time-travel/paradox thing. Neat, well-thought out, I love that England-future remembers it. And I love wondering at what point England realized it hadn't been a dream, but a glimpse of the future. It'd be hilarious if he was like, "America is a jerk now but he totally thinks I'm sex on legs later. YES."
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...heee. This was gorgeous, but I love imagining the more hilarious side of things - like how your England was serious and poignant and your America was hilarious until he realized who it was.
So that's why England keeps trying with America. I imagine at some point he remembers that America apparently thinks pirate-him is 'the best sex ever'. And dresses accordingly.
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THIS IS BRILLIANT. Yes, even though I am not a big fan of this pairing (well, I don't hate US/UK, just indifferent), I LOVE THIS FIC. Especially the epilogue; I like how you incorporate canon into this.
“Man, I love independence. And your ass.”
THIS IS WIN.
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This is nicely contrasted with the future America's kind words, and how lovey-dovey comfortable he is with expressing is feelings with UK. I don't know how you do it, but even though we don't really know how their feelings exactly evolved, I can feel the sheer scope of things that they've been through to be their presentday!selves and I really love this bit about your piece! I think you nailed both their characterisation for me, ( ... )
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