Re: England + Ensemble- Something with the play "The Mousetrap"
anonymous
June 11 2011, 03:05:54 UTC
“I don’t know why you wanted to start this inn in the first place. I have plenty of places in the countryside for us to stay at Alfred. You could just sell your grandmother’s place!” Arthur spouted irritated as he barged in the door with a load of firewood. He looked like a proper English country gentleman in his tweed vest, trousers, and large green overcoat. He stomped the snow off his shoes, shook his scarf out, and placed the gloves and hat on the dining table. When he still received no answer from me, he raised his large bushy eyebrows and pointed his green eyes pointedly at mine
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This is really great anon, absolutely hilarious! I love it, so very them. And I like the touch about the sign, too. 100% perfect! My only suggestions are that you put in a little more spacing between paragraphs and dialouge, it's a wee bit hard on the eyes. And maybe title it? Other than that, the writing is amazing and this looks hilarious! If it's going to be a multiparter, I can't wait for your update, and if it was just a oneshot, it was beautiful. Thanks so much for filling!
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