France/America, the twenties
anonymous
September 16 2010, 01:48:03 UTC
The Jazz age. The flappers. The Lost Generation. Really, this anon has a huge hard-on for the 20s, and was in a perpetual starry-eyed state while reading "A Moveable Feast." and "The Great Gatsby" and has been dying to see a historical take on this era with delicious France/America.
This anon is a huge lit nerd, so big bonus points for the members of The Lost Generation showing up/being mentioned (or even reading The Great Gatsby aloud? France has one damn sexy voice...)
Genderswitch of any variety is fine, and slash is fine too, of course. Human or country names are both fine. Whichever.
Re: France/America, the twenties
anonymous
November 1 2010, 15:36:55 UTC
I would love to try something with this, once I finish the fill I'm working on IF I can manage something that's not a clone of the fic I already wrote with the two of them along these lines.
The First Cut (is the Deepest)
anonymous
May 9 2011, 13:22:52 UTC
Author's Note: It didn't come out quite as I'd intended, but I think it has the hint of Hills Like White Elephants I was aiming for, if more blunt. I hope anon enjoys in any case. Takes place 1926-27-ish.England had called while America was packing his bags, half-drunk judging from the tone of his voice, and demanding to know what America hoped to find in Paris. Really, it had been less of a question and more the theme of an invective-laden speech against all things French (but most especially against the nation himself
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(con't) The First Cut (is the Deepest)
anonymous
May 9 2011, 13:24:19 UTC
It is strange though, his quiet. Of course France would notice it, having known America since he was still short enough to be lost in the barley fields, one small amber-gold head among many. He stopped, eyeing America, his mouth first wrinkling into a frown, then softening to a smile
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(con't) The First Cut (is the Deepest)
anonymous
May 9 2011, 13:25:04 UTC
France leaned forward on his elbows as if about to impart a great secret of the world. The light in his eyes danced like sunlight reflected off the Seine or like gaslight flickering in the New Orleans` dusk
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(con't) The First Cut (is the Deepest)
anonymous
May 9 2011, 13:25:49 UTC
“First loves America, ah, but they are the hardest.” He retrieved America`s drink, tugging the novel out of his hands to replace it with the alcohol. “No matter the circumstances under which they expire, it is the same. We never truly recover from them you know
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Re: (con't) The First Cut (is the Deepest)
anonymous
May 9 2011, 13:45:12 UTC
This was exquisite. Excuse me while I tear apart my own writing attempts.
And I love your fresh, un-clichéd methaphors, these two being my favourites:
...having known America since he was still short enough to be lost in the barley fields, one small amber-gold head among many.
France`s lips curved up into that languid, easy smile of his, the one that could charm a cat down from a tree and make America feel uncertain as a farmboy in Paris, dressed up in his borrowed best.
Re: (con't) The First Cut (is the Deepest)
anonymous
May 9 2011, 15:02:53 UTC
This is genuinely amazing; I read this four times, and I still have a pleased knot in my throat and nothing to say. God, why don't people write more of this pairing? Hell, but it's not that, and not just your effortless grasp of metaphor; it's the characterization that kills me. It's so rare to see real, serious characterization for either of these guys, and both of them seem real enough that they could step of the page at any moment. I felt strangely voyeuristic while I was reading this, actually. Like I was passing by and was was pulled into their orbit by the gravity of someone else's intimate moment. Like I was compelled to stay and watch a moment before I could wrench myself away. It's a very strange, compelling feeling. And ... I'm rambling. Um.
I love this. ♥ And am shamelessly begging for more, yeah. *_*
Re: (con't) The First Cut (is the Deepest)
anonymous
May 9 2011, 16:32:32 UTC
ack I love "Hills Like White Elephants" ...there was definitely a touch of it here. le end? Does that mean you might continue? oh please do if you can. It was so beautifully done.
Re: (con't) The First Cut (is the Deepest)
anonymous
May 9 2011, 22:32:42 UTC
Wait, what? Someone wrote an America with actual thoughts and problems? And a France who's a sexual being but not perverted to the point of being a caricature? In the same fic? ... What is the madness? <3<3<3
Also, even if you never write another fanfic, you should seriously never stop writing. This is a thing of beauty, and as long as you can come up with good plots, you could definitely get writing this lovely published. You'd still get a dozens of rejections letters before you got published, just like all other writers EVER, but you could definitely get published. Please keep writing! :Db
Re: (con't) The First Cut (is the Deepest)
anonymous
May 10 2011, 02:23:22 UTC
This fic. THIS FIC. I want to rake all of your metaphors into one big, colorful pile and jump in. Your grasp of metaphor is just number one in the long list of everything right and good with this story, but I don't have the words. I think you must have taken them, because dang, anon!
Now, if you'll excuse me.
*douses own writing in petrol* *lights a match*
Captcha says: "everyone schooled". No kidding, Captcha.
Re: (con't) The First Cut (is the Deepest)
anonymous
May 10 2011, 17:05:06 UTC
Oh my god, anon! This fill was a masterpiece. Perfectly characterized America and France, where you don't fall into the temptation of making them caricatures (where America is brainless and France is completely perverted), and the references to The Sun Also Rises were masterful. I'd say your writing reminds me more of...perhaps Hemingway or Fitzgerald's writing in general, rather than Hills Like White Elephants, because of its lyrical, slightly melancholy feel (something which I didn't get when reading Hills.) I will have to bookmark this fill so I can read it again later!
Re: (con't) The First Cut (is the Deepest)
anonymous
May 11 2011, 00:40:59 UTC
I agree with all of the other Anons! This was gorgeous! A work of art! You word choices were painterly, like the haiku of Basho. Please continue, please please!
The Jazz age. The flappers. The Lost Generation. Really, this anon has a huge hard-on for the 20s, and was in a perpetual starry-eyed state while reading "A Moveable Feast." and "The Great Gatsby" and has been dying to see a historical take on this era with delicious France/America.
This anon is a huge lit nerd, so big bonus points for the members of The Lost Generation showing up/being mentioned (or even reading The Great Gatsby aloud? France has one damn sexy voice...)
Genderswitch of any variety is fine, and slash is fine too, of course. Human or country names are both fine. Whichever.
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If you're interested in reading that one in the meantime however, it can be found here: http://jinsai.livejournal.com/214406.html
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And I love your fresh, un-clichéd methaphors, these two being my favourites:
...having known America since he was still short enough to be lost in the barley fields, one small amber-gold head among many.
France`s lips curved up into that languid, easy smile of his, the one that could charm a cat down from a tree and make America feel uncertain as a farmboy in Paris, dressed up in his borrowed best.
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I love this. ♥ And am shamelessly begging for more, yeah. *_*
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Also, even if you never write another fanfic, you should seriously never stop writing. This is a thing of beauty, and as long as you can come up with good plots, you could definitely get writing this lovely published. You'd still get a dozens of rejections letters before you got published, just like all other writers EVER, but you could definitely get published. Please keep writing! :Db
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Now, if you'll excuse me.
*douses own writing in petrol*
*lights a match*
Captcha says: "everyone schooled". No kidding, Captcha.
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Also I now have the song stuck in my head. >.<
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Would you be interested in a beta to make it nearly perfect?
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