I'm rather glad for that spark, too. I don't think it would be "America" if she didn't have that little bit of life and hope inside of her. I hope you'll continue to enjoy it, and thank you for your comment!
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anonymous
June 29 2010, 02:26:13 UTC
You are an amazing writer, with each word, tensions rise, trust is granted, shattered, Antonio and Gilbert freaking out, Francis being selfless...
Oh. Just, OH. Francis's actions speak of pure trust. He disarmed her fear and rage by laying himself bare and vulnerable and just - If you keep writing like this, I don't care if you don't respond to my comments. Author!Anon, this is beautiful.
All the questions I have scream "MAJOR PLOT POINT" so... guess I'll hold onto them and wait!
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anonymous
June 29 2010, 05:21:03 UTC
Couldn't wait.
I desperately want to know what the original mission was, and Where Matthew is in all this (I can't imagine him knowing, or rather, if he was able to do something, I can't see him NOT doing it) and - and how were Antonio and Gilbert chosen to be Francis's bodyguards?
That last one is likely the only one you can answer now, *Sheepish*
Will it comfort you to know that at least one of those will be answered in the next chapter? (I'll give you another hint and say that the mission relates to something we discussed above.)
Gilbert's story is interesting, because it will explain his reaction to Francis's actions in this chapter. Antonio, however, was a noble's son as well as one of Francis's childhood friends. Both Francis and Gilbert just seemed logical choices, considering their canon/fanon interaction, but I will say that in this 'verse, the ways they met were...different. And I hope I get a chance to explore that.
I'm so thrilled you're enjoying this, OP! Thank you so much for commenting.
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anonymous
June 30 2010, 03:57:46 UTC
You mean from that discussion that was deleted? Or did I miss one?
Well, if you don't get that chance, I'd love to see an author's not at the end describing it.
Good~ I know how much it can demotivate you when the people watching your fills and stories don't continue to comment, and I definitely want to see the natural ending of this story!
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anonymous
June 29 2010, 02:32:02 UTC
*teary eyes* My heart is kinda broken into teeny-tiny pieces now. I don't even know how to react to what Francis did, giving her that kind of power over him. I've been in a similar headspace to Alice's more than once (though never from something that awful) and really, that... that type of thing is the only way to really get through. I can't think of the word I want right now, and it's bugging me.
And, and Gilbert and Antonio. How do you manage to make them so PERFECT, and can you teach me please? And Lovi, oh dear lord, Lovi. I love him so much for his choice to help them, even though it's technically treason and OH JEEZ, THIS IS SO EPIC I DON'T EVEN. *implodes*
BRB, HUGGING LOVI, ALICE AND THE TRIO. *flails off into distance* I feel awful for loving this fill so much. orz
Well I'm not sure I can teach you, this is pretty much my first time writing Pru - UM. Practice. Lots and lots of practice. :D
That scene with Francis and Alice was...interesting to me for a lot of reasons. It's something I plan to address later on in the fic as well, because as much as his actions were trusting, and his intention was to reach Alice...there are a lot of problems with what he did, and it's going to come back to haunt him later.
But I do hope you keep enjoying this! <3 Thank you for your kind comment.
Author!Anon mentioned using "Alegria" as a reference to the Cirque du Soleil show by the same name, because that show has parallels in mood to the fic...
Too quote "The title is from the Cirque de Soleil song of the same name, because I’m incredibly bad at naming my own stories like that, though I do intend for it to have meaning at some point. Enjoy!"
Writernon got beaten to the punch. xD
anonymous
June 30 2010, 00:00:17 UTC
"Alegria," in Spanish, does indeed mean happiness, but the title itself will have relevance later in the story. I do try to match up music and writing when I title my work after songs/lyrics, but most of the time I may just hear something that inspires me - even if it's just the beat, or the melody, and not even what the song's about at all. Because as I said, I'm terrible at naming things. D:
I'm so happy that you liked it, though, and thank you for commenting! Regarding Gilbert and Antonio...they were both terrified, I think, but there's a difference in how they react to it. Antonio is basically providing a foil for Gilbert's reaction. Antonio's a lot more level-headed most of the time.
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And yet she still shows a spark and I'm glad for that. I love the universe you've created here and the characters that fit so perfectly into it.
Gorgeous!
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Oh. Just, OH. Francis's actions speak of pure trust. He disarmed her fear and rage by laying himself bare and vulnerable and just - If you keep writing like this, I don't care if you don't respond to my comments. Author!Anon, this is beautiful.
All the questions I have scream "MAJOR PLOT POINT" so... guess I'll hold onto them and wait!
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I desperately want to know what the original mission was, and Where Matthew is in all this (I can't imagine him knowing, or rather, if he was able to do something, I can't see him NOT doing it) and - and how were Antonio and Gilbert chosen to be Francis's bodyguards?
That last one is likely the only one you can answer now, *Sheepish*
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Gilbert's story is interesting, because it will explain his reaction to Francis's actions in this chapter. Antonio, however, was a noble's son as well as one of Francis's childhood friends. Both Francis and Gilbert just seemed logical choices, considering their canon/fanon interaction, but I will say that in this 'verse, the ways they met were...different. And I hope I get a chance to explore that.
I'm so thrilled you're enjoying this, OP! Thank you so much for commenting.
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Well, if you don't get that chance, I'd love to see an author's not at the end describing it.
Good~ I know how much it can demotivate you when the people watching your fills and stories don't continue to comment, and I definitely want to see the natural ending of this story!
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And, and Gilbert and Antonio. How do you manage to make them so PERFECT, and can you teach me please? And Lovi, oh dear lord, Lovi. I love him so much for his choice to help them, even though it's technically treason and OH JEEZ, THIS IS SO EPIC I DON'T EVEN. *implodes*
BRB, HUGGING LOVI, ALICE AND THE TRIO. *flails off into distance* I feel awful for loving this fill so much. orz
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That scene with Francis and Alice was...interesting to me for a lot of reasons. It's something I plan to address later on in the fic as well, because as much as his actions were trusting, and his intention was to reach Alice...there are a lot of problems with what he did, and it's going to come back to haunt him later.
But I do hope you keep enjoying this! <3 Thank you for your kind comment.
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Urgh, I think I can see some of those problems. >.< *flail* It's making me kinda nervous...
Oh, I do believe I shall. ♥ I love the way you manage to play my emotions like a finely tuned fiddle.
Captcha: advertised internet. loooool. Oh Captcha. X'D
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I was wondering what the title meant, is it a flower?
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Too quote "The title is from the Cirque de Soleil song of the same name, because I’m incredibly bad at naming my own stories like that, though I do intend for it to have meaning at some point. Enjoy!"
I didn't De-anon, I didn't
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I'm so happy that you liked it, though, and thank you for commenting! Regarding Gilbert and Antonio...they were both terrified, I think, but there's a difference in how they react to it. Antonio is basically providing a foil for Gilbert's reaction. Antonio's a lot more level-headed most of the time.
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