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“You did save his life back there Al,” Bill stated, opening the inn door. “Trent would’ve shot him, probably killed him ( ... )
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Gilbert is one of my fav characters~ <3
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His stomach knotted uneasily at that notion. Glasses were expensive to replace… And that pair in particular…
The world suddenly cleared, Texas resting against the bridge of his nose. Startled, the American looked up at the person that now stood beside Francis. Automatically, he felt his chest tighten, words of thanks dying on his lips.
“Really, I don’t check in for a while and you go and nearly get yourself killed,” the Spanish accented voice teased, before Anto- Spain reached out, ruffling his hair. “What am I going to do with you amigo“What are…?” Alfred began, but trailed off. His eyebrows knitted together further, unable to understand what Spain was doing here. He hated Alfred, didn’t he? After what happened years ago ( ... )
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I promise to update with something better very soon! And blame my friend for the Bad Friends Trio appearance. Heh, I had asked her who to throw in, and her response was Gilbert. And as I was already planning Francis to appear~ Antonio just had to tag along.
Also, what he is saying here is “You are so young” and then “so very young, little America”. Now, I had to use an online translator, as I fail at Spanish. So if there is an error please feel free to correct it! I would love you immensely in fact, if you do!
I apologize if this was pure crap. Thank you all again for all the lovely comments! Really, they keep me motivated!
The next update will be better! I swear!
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Bad Friends Trio ftw! But now won't people start asking questions on who the Trio are and how they know Alfred?
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My Spanish is fail as well so I can't help you too much. There might be something wrong with the structure, but heaven knows that I have the worst awareness of structure for languages, even English. XD I did notice this, though:
Usted es tan joven I don't think Spain would used "usted" when referring to Al since Spain is his senior and they seem pretty well acquainted.
Tan muy joven, pequeña América It should be pequeño not pequeña. Though the name America is feminine, he's referring to the person America, who is male.
If I'm wrong, please someone correct me for being a dunce. I love you authoraonon and can't wait for your next update. :)
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I agree with the above anon about the Spanish, as far as I can tell it is technically correct, save that female adjective. With the "usted" thing, not only is Antonio older than Alfred, they are more than just well-acquainted. If Author!anon wished to show in another way that Alfred has been forgiven, Antonio speaking as a friend would do it.
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The only thing I might have done differently is use Tú instead of Usted. Usted is a more formal way of saying you, while tú is more friendly/familiar. Nothing wrong with using usted though.
And as someone else mentioned the pequeña being changed to pequeño, but it's hard to say since America the word is feminine while the character is masculine. ...I guess either one would work?
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And forgot to say it, I can't wait for the next update, I love this fic ♥
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I'm so happy that badass trio is there. I love them dearly.
And how Spain was so nice to America even after the war is so heartwarming.
<3 <3 <3
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I agree with the the previous two anons that the "Usted" in the first phrase should be changed into a "tu" seeing is he is calling America little, himself. Along with that, the phrase "so very young" has been literally translated, creating a repetition that doesn't work in Spanish. I think we should take out one of the repeated words.
Now, on the issue of using the masculine or feminine for America, I agree that Alfred is male an should be dressed as one, but the problem is that in this sentence, Antonio is saying "little America" as opposed to "little Alfred". So, it is my personal preference (based on the noun we're addressing and because feminine sounds correct when it's next to America), I would keep it as feminine.
So, for me it would be:
“Tu eres tan joven...”
“Tan joven, pequeña América…” OR "Muy joven, peqeña America" (First preferred because they both start with the same sound at the start of the sentence and repetition)
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And I can't wait for more, author!anon.
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“If you wish, mon frère, I will not involve myself,” Francis began, taking a seat beside Alfred. “Until, that is, matters escalate. And then, well, then I can just not stand idly by while my friend is threatened.”
“I won’t like it, but if you really don’t want help, I’ll stand back too.” Antonio was frowning, worry creasing in his forehead. Gilbert just mumbled something in his own tongue, turning to face Francis.
“Oi, play me in chess.”
“And lose? No thank you,” came the amused tone. “However, I’m sure Monsieur Kirkland would not mind ( ... )
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