pieces of the elephant by technosage

[technosage]

Title: Pieces of the Elephant
Warnings: R, for slash
Characters/Pairing: Mohinder/Peter
Word Count: 1741
Standard disclaimer: Not making money here, not claiming ownership. Not mine, but I wish they were.
Author's Notes: for heroes_flashfic challenge, "In the Beginning", and heroes50 #4 - Search. I have not yet seen episode 3 and am unspoiled. Another entry in the "What

Comments

[ragdoll118]

Awesome, awesome awesome. I am such a Peter whore. I'm so in love with him right now. And Mohinder is also amazing and awesome(I'm really using that word to much). I love your writing. It's very clear, concise, and detailed, and it seems very in-character, what with the limited amount of episodes seen. Thank you so much for writing such a great fic. This really made my day.

[technosage]

Thank you so much!

I love these two. There's so much potential here, so much space for someone to truly understand Peter.

SPOILER FOR EP. 3 BELOW THIS POINT. (Just in case you haven't seen it yet.)

(And bah to Simone, who I didn't like and wouldn't like even if she wasn't cheating on Isaac.)

I'm forever getting Jossed about things like the powers, but I hope the core of the fic still pleases. Thanks again, so very very much.

[technosage]

Thank you. So so much. *beams*

And, yeah, I kinda take my Peter from just_katarin, and her fanon is my canon. So Nathan will always be a big part of Peter's life if I'm writing him. They're connected! *G*

And wow, even in fanfiction Mohinder is one sexy bastard.

♥ This makes my day! I love Mohinder. Yay!

(Also? I hate getting Jossed, and this show does it to me constantly. *pouts*)

[lampshade_days]

*giggles like mad* Love this. Spot on character voices. And, oh God, this line:

Mohinder's tongue licked along Peter's mouth, seeking, asking are you real? and Peter opened, telling him to take what he wanted and see how real Peter was.
Yesssss. 'Tis brilliant.

I can't wait for the time when these two get more on-screen time together. (Hopefully somewhere along the way we can lose Simone.)

[technosage]

Yay! Thank you SO much. *twirls*

I'm really so glad you enjoyed it, because I love my lad Mohinder, and he's gonna be getting sexed up a lot. Hee!

(OMG, I know. Skank. It's not because she's breaking up the slash pairings at all! She's just...GRAH. She *fails* at sympathetic.)

[darkfire_blade]

Eek. Yes, Mohinder, wow, he is quite the smooth genetisist. You did a great job with this fic. I liked the little details, like how the taxi company might have been just a little nervous about someone calling a random driver up. (or a random Suresh, after the first one was totally totalled in his car...)

Peter searching for that acceptance was wonderful as well. I really hope he finds it with Nathan soon. Gah, Nathan's being a jerk at the moment. Or is he just looking out for Peter once again? But he's a huge influence on Peter's life anyways isn't he?

Great fic, great great great hot smooth fic.

[technosage]

Thanks so much!

It's funny, Peter's POV can be very exacting. just_katarin and I were discussing this, but he has this insane need to say it "just so" and to tell all kinds of things that are important and related to him that we're just like, "eh, get to the kissing already". *g* I'm glad it makes an interesting read, otherwise I'd have to throttle the muse. Hee!

Nathan, Nathan, Nathan... I doubt Peter will get acceptance from him ever. They may reach and accord and satisfaction, but Nathan's not going to change who he is overnight, and Peter's so conditioned to his rejection, I doubt he'd see the acceptance if it was offered, you know? I mean, he would, because he craves it so spectacularly, but it would take awhile for it to change anything for him.

Again, thank you so so so much! I love flashfic. *g*

[expositionary]

I am in love with the fact that Heroes is such a new fandom and there is already GREAT FIC to be found. ♥ ♥ For which I thank you hugely.

I like what you've done with Peter here. Judging from what we've seen, he's a hesitant sort of character, he's the person that no one seems to really listen to, and that comes across here wonderfully.

And, uh, yeah: Mohinder. ♥

[technosage]

Yay! Thank you. I'm so glad you're enjoying what you've found to read. just_katarin and I saw it at Comic Con (or I did and made her watch the pilot as soon as it became available. *g*) and we've been writing fic ever since. There's more on both of our journals (pimpity pimp *snicker*) if you're looking around.

Well, after last night, I'm a bit torn about my characterization here. On the one hand, I think I nailed aspects of this, down to the dialogue. On the other hand, I'm not sure whether being able to demonstrate his powers would make him bolder. He did push at Mohinder quite a bit, and I think that burning need to have what he wants (from Simone to Mohinder) is something I'll want to incorporate into later fics. He's not quite as soft and dreamy as I want to make him, and he's getting a bit of an edge.

(I still think he bottoms liek woah, though. *g*)

So, I'm curious if you still think the characterization holds up after this week.

And, yeah. Mohinder. The hotass. GUH. ♥

Thanks so much for reading and enjoying. It's SO appreciated!

[expositionary]

This comment is late because I am a dork. Anyhow, I wanted to say, I think that the characterization does still hold up -- it's a little at odds with all of the reluctance we're seeing in Mohinder now, but the characters still hold true.

And besides, I'm of the opinion that the discouraged Mohinder we've seen lately is a little out-of-character, not that we have much to go on. I'm hoping that something renews his faith soon.

[technosage]

UGH. And I'm SO lame and late in responding back to you. I'm sorry, hon. It's been a wild couple of months.

Anyhow, I'm looking forward to a good year for Mohinder. *hands* And lots of screentime with the Petrellis, which is fun. Thanks again for reading and commenting.