[SMAPfic] standing there in the red light

[hereticpop]

oh god. this parasite sucked as much life out of me as was possible. and then got finished. actually. i thought i'd be writing it forever.

the donation fic for ficofthegoblin. i think i screwed your amazing request, or it got lost somewhere between all the other themes and overflowing words that i managed to squeeze in it. i hope you can still enjoy it and

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[graucasper]

O.M.G.

The visuals.

Really, I could pick this thing apart phrase by phrase and it would take ages...

So. God, the visuals.

I love you. I hope it's enough. Thank you.

[hereticpop]

it's more than enough. :)
and THANK YOU. ♥

[there's too many phrases in it to pick it apart, me thinks.]

[graucasper]

[That's why I don't even want to start =)]

OK, one thing then: what I REALLY love about this piece is Goro thinking and seeing in monochrome - I so love black & white in any art form. And it works for Goro as the spectator and Kimura as the actor/model so well that it's practically perfection verbalized. I think this concept will be stuck in my head for a very long time =)

[hereticpop]

I'm a sucker for black & white images with red elements. so I guess black and white and red are the theme colours here. and this was actually one of the first things I thought up, the seeing in monochrome thing, and from there it all became so heavily visual.

once again, thank-you-thank-you for sharing your thoughts. <333

[faiee]

O.O

The porn was so hot, but honestly, what made it even sort of cute were all the random bits of information like the cats watching, Goro hearing Nakai on television, how Goro's so passive-aggressive about everything - doing everything slowly because he knows it'll annoy Kimura and that'll lead to even better things.

I'm terrible at commenting these days. But I just wanted to say this is hot! <3

[hereticpop]

waaah, you just contributed to this fic's emotional stability. it was really worried about the hotness of its porn, because it didn't work for me at all. [you know how it is - or maybe you don't, I hope - when you keep writing the thing for so long, that you start seeing every word seperately and it doesn't visualize for you anymore. so I was really wondering if it's any hot.]
it was so dangerously bordering on TakuGoroNakai too. D:

all the random bits seem to be my specialty, though, so I am glad they worked.

pfft, don't worry baby, it's all fine. thank youuuuu. ♥

[ficofthegoblin]

Wait, TakuGoroNakai? Really? How would've THAT played out?

[hereticpop]

I'm not really sure myself, it was more like Nakai's omnipresence [popping up every second paragraph, before I won and deleted him] lingering somewhere in the background as a general hint. or something. in the end, I'm TakuGoroNakai's bitch, but I wanted to have a purely takugoro fic here. :P

[25lalalee36]

I...just don't know what to say...
Hot... That for first...
The rest will come after I read it again and able to put something meaningful together

[hereticpop]

haha, knowing that it killed your brain a little is already quite flattering, bb. ♥

[phylosophie]

sorry to all of my f-list that had to put up with my whining while i was writing.
We're used to it. =D

[hereticpop]

true. XDDD
but I love you guys. ♥

[phylosophie]

We love you too or else we wouldn't be here. ♥

[stbluemoon]

Oh my. This is so beautiful, I think my heart just melted.

I love how you wrote Takuya though Goro's eyes, the way his perfection is so natural and effortless that it makes you wonder how he does it. "makes Goro wonder how much of it is a show, a calculation, and how much is just boiling in Takuya’s blood, out of control." <-- I wonder about the same thing sometimes too.

And the Goro-ness in everything Goro does, the hair, thinking of a mirror, “You don’t know what this is? Should I explain?”, ahahahaha XD

“Do I want to know what the other one’s called?”

IT MUST BE NAKAI. OR SOME OTHER VARIATION OF HIS NAME.

“Your cat hopped onto my lap and wanted to play with my balls,” he complains.

And my twisted mind has a cheap thrill imagining which cat.

What comes back in the same way is a sign of a fall.OMG, I want to engrave this line on a plaque and hang it up on a wall

[hereticpop]

aww, thank you. ♥

and uhmmm, I didn't include this in the end, 'cause it was too fluffy and I already hate that SMAP makes me write too many fluffy and sweet things, but it was something along the line of,

While their master is busy, two cats roll on the carpet in the living room. Taku (the one that likes to watch) sprawls lazily, intending to sleep. Hiro (the one that likes to attack people's laps) keeps turning in place, somewhat discontent.

Then Hiro smacks Taku's ear with its paw when Taku least expects it.

so I hope this answers your questions about the cats. 8D

OMG, I want to engrave this line on a plaque and hang it up on a wall.
this line got somehow paraphrased from some philosopher's thoughts 'cause I was studying for the finals while writing but I can't remember who it was or what it was originally about. but I thought the idea behind it is quite brilliant too