Comments | helike: [original story] Somewhere a Clock Is Ticking

helike

[original story] Somewhere a Clock Is Ticking

Sep 12, 2009 20:24

No matter what I'll do, it won't be any better. Here you have it. You don't want to know my opinion about it >.> BTW... Does it bother you that I use this " " instead of this “ ”?

Title: Somewhere a Clock Is Ticking
Genre: General
Rating: PG/K
Word count: 3884 (Shoot me. It was supposed to be short -.-;)
Summary: Getting drunk never paid - he ( Read more... )

!original story, - original

Comments 2

dune_master September 27 2009, 19:26:32 UTC

O hai thar, I remembered to comment! ^_~

I'm exceedingly bad at it, though. I loved the premise of the story and the use of mythology (clever) and this:

"Get yourself a pair of contact lenses and throw away the glasses." He smiled at her. "You look much better without them."
Somehow, after everything, that was sweet. XPP

helike September 27 2009, 20:06:51 UTC

Happens to everyone :P

Mythology rules in general and I'll have to use it one more time at least :D

I suppose you could call that part "getting a revenge", too. In a way ^^; I don't think that he thought that she would react in such a way, though.

Thanks for reading and commenting :)