Paranormal romance: Gehenna (Prologue & Chap One) PG13

[helent]

Title: Gehenna (Prologue and Chapter One)
Author: helent
Rating: PG13
Genre(s): Supernatural/angst/action/romance
Summary: Whatever she’d been expecting of Hell it wasn’t what Liz Grant found. People and demons alike can be predator or victim. Caught between opposing sides in a fight for eternal life or eternal death, she has no option but to throw

Comments

[apsis]

What an intriguing set of premises. If you promise to finish it, I'll promise to read it.

[helent]

Thank you, apsis! I'm so pleased that it grabbed your attention. I do intend to finish it and hopefully you'll enjoy the rest.

Thanks again! Helen

Just the prologue

[gonetoutah]

I only had time to read the prologue. It was pretty good, well written, tight, plenty of tension. Very good. There was just one thing that I didn't like: "Michael Thane caught the scent of a fresh novice-hell-slang for a new arrival." I do not thing editorializing so early in the story is a good idea. Find some other way to tell your readers what a "novice" is.

Re: Just the prologue

[helent]

Hi! Thanks for the comments! I see your point and I'll definitely have a re-think on that text. I really appreciate your stopping by to read and give me your thoughts.:)

[helent]

Okay that's it, free virtual cake for a week :P Seriously, I'm tickled pink that you enjoyed these first parts so much. Funnily enough, you caught me on your journal, lol. Don't worry this isn't a scratch-me-I'll-scratch-you thing *g*. I'm in a reading mood rather than writing mood tonight and your post is just under mine. I'm only a little way in, but I already like your quirky style; it's got the dark edgy sort of feel that always grabs me. More later on your own journal.

[helent]

D'oh what a typo. That should read isn't!