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hectic1

First Contact- Chapter 2

Jul 22, 2009 20:54

Disclaimer: All characters in this fic belong to ABC/Shondaland. No profit intended.

Rating: PG-13.

Pairing: Addison/Erica

Summary: A re-envisioning of that night when Callie and Mark oh so rudely bailed on Addison and Erica.

Personal note: I always wished there had been more interaction between Addison and Erica on that godforsaken show, because in ( Read more... )

addica, grey's anatomy, fanfic

Comments 30

jaguarjg July 23 2009, 16:46:30 UTC

You really got Addison and Erica´s voices spot on, I loved the scene in the hotel room, Addison trying to pick away at Erica´s defenses and her observations of Erica were quite alluring. I actually wanted to Addison to seduce her and this pairing isn't really my thing. The elevator scene was hilarious and absurd, I loved it, especially when Addison goes for broke and asks her about the kiss, I could feel the heat from Erica's face from here, very entertaining, cant wait for the next part to see what happens with Callies arrival!

hectic1 July 23 2009, 19:44:17 UTC

Woohoo! Another convert. I'm going to try to get everyone on the Addica train before this is all over. Yeah, Callie's arrival should ramp up the tension. Poor Erica, I so love putting her awkward situations.

I'm glad the elevator scene worked for you, that was my hang-up with this chapter. I wasn't sure it worked, it's reassuring to know that it did. Thanks for the awesome comments.

Holy Cannoli! Well Done! dianeb_047 July 23 2009, 17:41:33 UTC

This chapter was totally worth the wait. I swear, I could *see* all of this - you nailed Addison and Erica. The paragraph that started "Addison bit her lip." had me howling with the swimming analogy! OMG.

I didn't see the kiss coming, but considering everything that came before, it was not at all out of character or even surprising. Guess she was practicing for the future, huh?

And the old couple in the elevator? How perfect were they? But Hannah's shoes, I was confused about Hannah's shoes. Don't the dykes always wear the "comfortable shoes?" HAR!

Seriously, you did great on this one, and I can't really see why you might have been biting your nails over it. The "twist" at the end was just the cherry on top. Nicely done.

Your writing style kicks ass and the fact that your spelling, punctuation, and grammar were correct only adds to the joy.

Re: Holy Cannoli! Well Done! hectic1 July 23 2009, 20:24:57 UTC

Mmm...cannoli. So ya liked it. I'm relieved. It seemed like I was all geeked out about this for nothing. Stupid, brain. And if I was nailing Addison and Erica, I wouldn't be here right now. *rimshot* Wow, I'm in an odd mood, excuse the strangeness of this response ( ... )

hot_4_hahn July 23 2009, 23:16:44 UTC

This is so well done, even if it’s nothing like what I was anticipating. *wink* Addison keeps wavering back and forth between her carnal urges, her moral tenets, and perhaps a touch of annoyance at Erica. *eyebrow raise* I like it! Erica’s quite the enigma, me thinks. I could always imagine that it would sometimes be a struggle between wanting to shake her and wanting to kiss her.

At least I know now that Addison’s the kind of lady to make someone feel comfortable in her hotel room before getting down to business. A little wine, a little conversation equals a little seduction, right? Well…normally. But, again we’re faced with Erica Hahn. I could see the annoyance painted across Addison’s features, at times. However, I loved their little back and forth, each getting their digs in at times.

”It's one of the best hospitals I've ever worked at."
"Yet you left," Erica stated
…
"You like Callie, don't you?"
"Of course. She's my friend."
…
"But we're all friends here."
"Are we?" The words were sharp.I think this is about ( ... )

hectic1 July 24 2009, 00:59:28 UTC

No smut for you! I totally bailed on the idea. I think by now it's been well documented exactly how much the smut hates me. I struggled to even write a kiss. It's all so awkward. I guess I need to practice. Do they teach writing smut somewhere? Smut writing 101. Are you the professor, Dr. H4H? Damn it, I'm in a weird mood today. I'm so far off the point I don't even remember it ( ... )

More Addica at Last seabookmonger July 24 2009, 02:09:19 UTC

I just loved the way this fic started...Archfield as bad dream. Yes. And Addison knows better, tries to talk herself out of this but but can't seem to help herself. As usual. And oh, the kiss, the kiss but where is Erica going? Hey, come back here!
I must confess that I recently went back to re-read part one and had this secret hope that we'd get to see more soon. I never guessed that you'd end it this way and that made your story really fun to read. And what is Callie thinking now?

Re: More Addica at Last hectic1 July 24 2009, 12:14:51 UTC

Yeah, the Archfield. Does anything good happen at that place?

Addison wants to do the right thing. She's just not sure what the right thing is in this situation. And, let's face it, the woman's a slave to her desires. Now it's a question of whether or not she thinks Callie's interested in Erica or Erica's interested in Callie or if she's more interested than either of them. Huh? Yeah. :p

I know it's been a while. Sorry. I'll try not to have a whole month go by before the next update. No promises, but I'll try.

I'm glad you thought it was a fun read, I'm trying to keep the angst down to the bare minimum. Thanks for hanging in there.

sapphicwarrior July 24 2009, 19:21:28 UTC

this was great! really loved it :)!

hectic1 July 24 2009, 19:43:20 UTC

Thank you! :))