SPN Fic: Lakeside

[hebrew_hernia]

Title: Lakeside
Fandom: Supernatural/The Time Traveler's Wife by Audrey Niffenegger
Word Count: ~1700
Warnings: Cursing...?
Rating: MA-ish? If you're old enough to read The Time Traveler's Wife, you're old enough to read this.
Summary: An accidental time traveler. An accidental family.
Spoilers/Continuity: Supernatural: Spoilers up through 2.01 "In My

Comments

[arabella_hope]

This IS very interesting...

I don't really know anything about the book, so Alba to me is an OC, but she's very believable and unique - consistant the whole way through. I like her.

I think your Sam & Dean are pretty on the money too, and I don't think there was any jarring shift from Dean's POV to Sam's...though Sam doesn't say much in the fic. But the line where he askes Dean "Can she do that? Shouldn't the world explode or something?" made me laugh. I liked it.

Overall, it's very cute and enjoyable to read, definetly!

And for your cut tags, just use lj-cut text="whatever you want" inside the...whatever they're called. These things: < >

Hope that helps! Great work :)

[hebrew_hernia]

Thanks so much for the comments, they really help!

Do you think Sam should say more? And what about the narration/exposition? I always feel like I write body language really awkwardly. Dialogue, too.

The line about the world exploding is one of my favorites, too. It's sort of my shout out to one of the great inconsistencies of sci-fi canon (by which I mean that there are certain conventions that exist throughout all of the works of sci-fi I've ever read, but whether a person can cross his/her own timeline, talk to/touch him or herself, etc, varies a lot canon to canon or fandom to fandom). I can see Sam getting his sci-fi on, you know?

[ignipes]

Oh, I like this! I don't think it's confusing at all, and the tenses and POVs seem fine to me. I love how the boys just take it all in stride.

[hebrew_hernia]

That's our boys, right?

Thanks for the comment!

[miss_begonia]

Sam leans over. “Can she do that? Shouldn’t the world explode or something?”

Hee! I love this, sweetie - you've got both canon's characters down, and it's awesome. Your dialogue is great, very real, and I love how you meld these worlds. It totally works. I want to see more of this universe, and STAT! =)

[hebrew_hernia]

I'm so glad to hear I didn't bugger up the characterization. Thank you so much for the feedback!

[krisomniac]

Ohhh How much do I LOVE that you did this? Really, two of my favorites all together. I love that Clare is going to be friends with the boys, and Alba is just as precocious and together as she is in the novel.

[hebrew_hernia]

Thank you so much! I've had this idea floating around since "IMToD" -- I just saw Tessa and thought, "That's Alba." I'm so glad that you enjoyed it as much as I enjoyed writing it! Also, I'm really jealous that you have a TTTW icon.

[scribewraith]

Wow that's really nice - I like how comfortable the deTamble's are with it all and you've set up some of the background nicely with hints - are you still going to write more? Cause I'd love to read it!

[hebrew_hernia]

Why yes, I will be writing more... Thank you so much for the feedback!

[scribewraith]

you're welcome *grin*