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FIC: The Importance of Being Toki (Nathan/Toki, NC-17)

Feb 10, 2010 18:34

TO: puella_improba
FROM: twilightspeaks

Title: The Importance of Being Toki
Pairing: Toki/Nathan
Timeline: Post season 3 opening, but prior to events in “Fatherklok.”
Rating: NC17
Warnings: Serveta makes an appearance.
Betas: AbelValentine, Zsomeone, and Skwisguarded
Summary: The boys go camping at a Swedish music festival. Hijinks ensue.

( One thing they all agreed on was that it could have been a lot worse. )

made by twilightspeaks, gifts: *fic, gifts: *rated nc-17, gifts: serveta gen, gifts: nathan/toki, made for puella_improba

Comments 15

restinginpieces February 11 2010, 01:19:40 UTC

this was.. epic. i love it. the way that most of it is what toki is thinking or feeling, and how there is not much dialogue otherwise.. manages to speak volumes and really paint a picture. an extremely hot picture, might i add.

also, 'Moses of sluts,' LOL. <3

[ *snerk* ] supes_ February 11 2010, 01:25:56 UTC

that was a great line, i agree. XD

twilightspeaks March 5 2010, 01:29:15 UTC

Thank you! I like introspective prose. XD And I pretty much wrote this whole story just to have an excuse for that one line, so I am glad that you laughed at it.

skwisguarded February 11 2010, 02:02:45 UTC

Funny, sexy, freaky (Serveta! Gasp!) HOT. I like it. Especially the ending.

lostscore February 11 2010, 04:43:47 UTC

I love something like this. To the bitter end. It sounds and feels like something I'd write myself because it's something I'd like to read.

It's an essay...AND a piece of prose. I've made serious conjecture against how I write and I always figure it bugs people. Maybe this is not the most flattering comment to be making - comparing it to something I'd write. But I really DO like this kind of a story. Especially when it's done better than I could.

misdreya February 11 2010, 18:54:18 UTC

As I was reading this, I kept coming across lines of prose or dialogue that made me think, "Wow, I should really highlight this and include it in my comments, saying how much I liked it."

After coming across about 15 of those, I gave up. I can't highlight and paste the entire thing. Gosh.

A+, you hereby have my heart.

twilightspeaks March 5 2010, 01:51:54 UTC

Thank you! That's a very high compliment.

Also, your icon cracks me right up.

puella_improba February 11 2010, 22:55:05 UTC

OMG!!!! my first thought when I read the title was "Oh I love the importance of being earnest :D good fic title" Then I read my name and was like OH MY FUCKING GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOD~ YAAAAAYYYY~

you really went for all my brownie points, did you? XD even for Serveta and braids!
but seriously! Toki and Serveta! That's soooooooo wrong! XDDDDDDDD
I was very worried when Toki kicked her in the face and then she didn't appear again for so long ("Serveta, Liebchen, where are you, Improba has a bandaid for you! ó.ò") but when Skwisgaar beat up Toki for beating up his mudder it really made the fic for me <333333 ( ... )

twilightspeaks March 5 2010, 01:40:36 UTC

Man, thank you for appreciating my literature pun title. Nobody ever mentions 'em, so I kinda figured nobody noticed or cared or thought I was being half as clever I thought I was being. XD

Serveta should be included in more fics! I was so excited when I saw her name in your request that I almost didn't read those other words surrounding it. I mean, I did read them, obviously, but I was still somewhat fixated. So you are welcome, and thank you for coming up with an awesome request! I thought I'd played out my ability of finding new ways to hook Nathan and Toki up, but you proved me wrong!