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Between the Devil and the Deep Blue Sea - Team Fanon

Apr 08, 2008 07:41

Title: Between the Devil and the Deep Blue Sea
Team: Fanon
Author: faynia
Prompt: The Devil
Wordcount: 14,066
Rating: R
Warnings: AU, non-graphic dubious consent
Summary: Draco Malfoy always gets what he wants. Only, this time, what he wants is someone he can never have.
Author's Note Thanks to my betas J, S and L. Some text was lifted from DH pg. 458. ( Read more... )

r, round i, fic, prompt: the devil, team fanon

Comments 31

romaine24 April 8 2008, 19:44:43 UTC

Wow, a dark!veela story. What an interesting take on the usual fanon!Veela "coming of age" leading to a beautiful angel type of Veela. The opposing view was gripping and Draco's fighting of demons both personal and physical was very well done. I really enjoyed the story. The ending was a tad abrupt for us h/d readers who always want more.

Just a side: The intro scene with the Draco trying to silence the peacocks was great. Those damn birds really are noisy.

jamie2109 April 8 2008, 20:20:30 UTC

I really loved the dark Veela aspect of this fic; where the story covered aspects of the magical creature that weren't sanitised for public consumption. I really felt awful for Draco as he suffered through this story and even the ending was really only scratched the surface of H/D. It would be wonderful if you continued this after the fest. Excellent, original take on the Veela fic.

absynthedrinker April 8 2008, 20:36:07 UTC

You absolutely killed me with the ending! I thought the self-loathing and tension were a brilliant take on the usual Veela story. I thought the "darkness' here was applied with enormous skill and to great effect. This was superbly done from start to finsh. Thanks.

Peace,

Bubba

shoeboxer4life April 8 2008, 22:17:07 UTC

As others have said, I thought your take on veela coming of age was interesting and creative. Thought-provoking. The writing left me a little confused throughout the whole piece, however. I didn't totally understand what was going on at different moments. Some stories are supposed to keep the reader in the dark a little bit, but instead of feeling encouraged by my confusion, or compelled to figure it out, I felt a little annoyed. Let me read it again, perhaps more slowly, and see if it all makes more sense. Thanks for a thought-provoking story!

casynne April 9 2008, 01:15:17 UTC

I admit that I really liked the first two thirds of your story, as it pushed all my buttons, but the last third of it felt, well, a bit weak? The story was broken off so abruptly that I kept thinking that the mod had been remiss in their modly duties and had not posted the whole fic. The ending was too sudden; also, Draco's unanticipated self-sacrificing thoughts seemed too dissimilar from what he felt at the beginning of the story. He was too weak and intimidated. That said, I liked everything else about it - Draco's frustration and self-loathing at the inability to control his Veela allure, his power of empathy; the effect it had on him, his vulnerability and rawness of emotions. And I liked your Harry, too - both strong and human, and never giving in or breaking ( ... )