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kahuna_burger in hawaii5_0slash

fic : It's Not Okay (But It Will Be Alright)

Mar 26, 2013 06:19

tkeylasunset asked for some McDanno hurt/comfort to cheer her up, so I tried for emotional h/c with a bit of navel gazing on the differences between cops and military. Then someone at work mentioned Les Miserables so the doctrine of salvation through grace shoved its way in ( Read more... )

genre: gen, fanfic, pairing: mcgarrett/danno, rating: pg-13

Comments 12

simplyn2deep March 26 2013, 16:26:47 UTC

Danny, you're a good friend and partner for being there for Steve like that

kahuna_burger March 26 2013, 16:46:52 UTC

It was a bit of a balancing act in that Danny wanted Steve not to be hurting because he cares, but at the same time knew if he could stop him from hurting too easily, then Steve wasn't the guy he cared about. I hope I was able to get both sides of it across in this.

simplyn2deep March 26 2013, 16:50:31 UTC

oh yes you did.

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kahuna_burger March 26 2013, 21:32:18 UTC

Thank you, glad you like it.

tkeylasunset March 26 2013, 20:16:14 UTC

I love this story so much, I cannot express it with any degree of articulateness (which I'm not even sure is a word!)

All I can say is Thank you thank you thank you!!!

<3<3<3

kahuna_burger March 26 2013, 21:31:34 UTC

*grin* Thank you for the inspiration, I haven't written anything in a while.

I made a couple of minor changes in this version from the one I posted on your thread, just delaying the information that an accidental shooting was the issue because I decided the way I had it was awkwardly blunt.

mcparrot March 27 2013, 10:37:10 UTC

Oh that was very good. And different too, I'd never thought of Steve having qualms over having to shoot, even if it wasn't necessarily a bad guy he shot.

Danny was very very good.

kahuna_burger March 27 2013, 12:13:59 UTC

Yeah, the original 'draft' of this story in my head had an extended discussion about Steve's overseas missions where there were Teammates (work with them not to die), Enemies (trained to kill them) and Collateral Damage (not going out of your way to kill them but compartmentalized as an acceptable and necessary evil) but except in a hostage extraction, Our Civilians (who it is our duty to defend) are a nebulous concept a world away. For police officers, though, Our Civilians are mixed right in with the Enemies - often they can even be the same people based on whether they pose an immediate threat. The possibility that you could shoot someone on a false threat assessment who, had you understood the reason for their presence, you would consider it your duty to protect from the people you were after - not something I can see as part of Steve's experience.

See why I had to cut that aspect? Even summarizing the conversation is too long! *grin*

Thanks for the comments.

navyvet90 March 31 2013, 03:22:28 UTC

Poor Steve. What a terrible situation to be caught in. It's hard for some regular folks to imagine that whether military of police forces, those people lay their lives on the line and have to make split second decisions that couid mean the difference between life or death. Even if it turns out to be a justified shooting, it's never easy to live with it. Good thing he has Danny to help him through it.
Very effective story, well told. Kudos!

kahuna_burger March 31 2013, 17:35:37 UTC

Thank you. As I disclaimed, I'm neither military nor police (and, to be honest, am fundamentally unsuited to the military) so I had some concerns about how my take on the issue would be received. But it was a type of h/c I hadn't seen before so I figured t was worth trying.