The sacrifice

May 10, 2011 23:16

legion, a&a, writing

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adaliagreyson May 10 2011, 23:58:33 UTC
I would say go for it. It seems like the perfect place to put it. Just remember you can always rewrite it or just skip it if it doesn't seem to work.

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hasu_hime May 11 2011, 00:01:33 UTC
Trueee. Hmm. I'll give it a go, lol... :/

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tygenco_x May 11 2011, 00:53:55 UTC
The wonderful thing is that you don't have to go into insane amounts of detail. Don't hide the whole event under miles of ridiculously flowery words (see also a good deal of Harlequin Novels).

I will say that I have always found it difficult to write out such scenes, but, for this particular piece, I'd say go with things being sweet and new for Audrey (I mean, she's going to be with Gabriel, for cryin' out loud) and I'm fairly certain that this is going to be something of a brand new experience for him.

Write it up a few different ways. Take your time.

And breathe! Breathing helps :)

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hasu_hime May 11 2011, 00:58:11 UTC
Heh, that's good advice, thanks. :) I don't think I'll have any trouble omitting gruesome details.. that's the part I'd be getting flustered over anyway, haha.

I get the feeling that Audrey would sort of take the lead, since to Gabriel it's an entirely new experience, having only had his first proper kiss a few days ago. But I agree that it should be sweet. In a way, that makes my job easier. I'm not that great at raunchy, hahaha. :D

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diardanrose May 12 2011, 03:13:59 UTC
If you really want it, I say go for it. You're an awesome writer and I'm sure all your readers have faith in you to pull it off well.

If you're really not sure, I'd be totally up for helping you beta it. I have a bit of experience with sex scenes [no judgment there] so I think I could help you out there, if you want. [To add to that, I'm an English major whose working on publishing a book. I'm pretty good at this sort of thing.]

Still love the story ^_^

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