Comments | harlequin_sv: Star Child by <strong class="lj-user"><a href="/read/user/kayladie">kayladie</a></strong> (Part 2 of 3)

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Star Child by kayladie (Part 2 of 3)

Mar 25, 2007 13:00

Title: Star Child (Part 2 of 3)
Rating: R (for sex/violence)
Word Count: 24,097
Cover: Cover #2

Summary: Alex Luthor's father is enraged by the latest scandal his son has found himself in, so he banishes him to the wilds of Kansas. On the way, Alex's party is attacked by rogue Indians, who are fiercely protecting the land that they believe the ( Read more... )

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enderwiggin24 March 27 2007, 21:09:37 UTC

// He wasn’t sure what he expected, slaps, punches, a kick, but all Adonis did was squat in front of him and take Alex’s face in his hands. He rubbed his thumbs gently over Alex’s brows, before sweeping them across his cheeks, then one hand glided over the smoothness of his bald head and curved around to cup the nape of his neck ( ... )

enderwiggin24 March 30 2007, 14:58:22 UTC

I absolutely adore it when people pick out their favorite bits in a story I've written, cause I like to see if theirs match up to my own! The line about Alex thinking of himself as a zoo exhibit was one of my personal faves.

And I wanted to hug poor little Clark, too! And then big Clark as well for what I did to him later in the story!

carolandtom March 31 2007, 19:09:57 UTC

This was a great part! I loved their dynamic and I enjoyed the moment Clark chose to reveal he could understand everything Lex said. That was sexy and funny! You did a great job with the progression of their relationship.

I enjoyed thet description of the fight and the fact that both Clark and Lex were trying to save the other's life. Now I'm looking forward to the final part! (Off to read it)

carolandtom April 3 2007, 02:56:21 UTC

I have to confess that Clark's reveal was one of my very favorite parts of the story! I'm glad you liked it. I'm thrilled that you liked the fight, because I usually have an awful time with fight scenes. It's so easy to just get bogged down in trying to describe each movement that I worry it can become boring. Glad this one turned out okay!

jakrar April 2 2007, 02:26:26 UTC

Oooh -- this story keeps getting better! Kal is such a sneaky bastard, though, listening to Alex all that time without admitting he knows English! And poor Alex, telling him things he'd never told anyone else. *smacks Kal, just a little* I do love Kal choosing that particular moment to come clean, though, given Alex's whispered remark about making him feel so much better. *eg ( ... )

jakrar April 3 2007, 03:04:42 UTC

I simply adore stories with dominant, strong, sexy Clark or Kal. I couldn't resist writing one of my own! But at the same time, I wanted to make it clear that Alex is very much an equal partner in their relationship.

You were very right to be worried about Gray Deer! :D But Alex and Kal take care of each other very well. Thanks so much for reading!

I don't mind at all the heads-up about the affect/effect. (I frequently get those mixed up, dammit!) I didn't have a beta reader for this and I thought I caught everything myself. (I read over and over my own work obsessively!) I changed it in my copy of the story and it'll be fixed when I post in my LJ. Thanks!

teot April 7 2007, 04:13:25 UTC

“I could make that so much better for you, Kal,” Alex whispered. And then he realized he’d said that out loud.

I absolutely adored that scene. Very hot.

teot April 9 2007, 01:04:38 UTC

Thanks, I'm so glad you thought it was hot, as I haven't written much m/m slash, and I was nervous!