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HT100 Challenge #179: Objectified

Oct 11, 2011 15:39

Title: Undone
Prompt #179: Objectified
Rated: PG
Word Count: 100
Characters: Beecher, Genevieve, Keller

Mindlessly he thumbs his ring finger, rotating the missing band of gold.

Round and round it goes…

He remembers promises he intended to keep, vows he meant to honour, a love he assumed would last forever.

Where it stops…

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Comments 4

ozsaur October 13 2011, 03:08:06 UTC

Intense! So bare bones but with incredible impact! Nicely done!

levitatethis October 13 2011, 17:04:52 UTC

Thank you! I was going for simple but pointed.

luci_2 October 14 2011, 22:45:16 UTC

Those mute exchanges of glances are as significant as dialogs.
And then there is always Toby's internal dialog.
Thanks for posting.

levitatethis October 17 2011, 17:25:30 UTC

Watching the show, the way they looked at each other always felt loaded and full of unspoken dialogue. I wanted to meld that with Toby's thoughts to hit home just what he's struggling beneath.

Thanks!