Comments | hardtime100: HT100 Challenge #7-Change Canon: Toby Spoke

frooshoo in hardtime100

HT100 Challenge #7-Change Canon: Toby Spoke

May 15, 2003 08:55

Whew, I forgot to do this yesterday, I really didn't change canon that much, more like maybe one line, there were way too many scenes to choose from, and I could have gone on and on, like now*g ( Read more... )

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snarkhunt May 15 2003, 09:30:10 UTC

Mmmm I love this Danielle. "lingering even after they had parted" - I love that line, that feeling that stays. You really got the emotion and sheer overwhelming-ness of the scene.

frooshoo May 15 2003, 10:10:00 UTC

Why thank you, Eliza!! For some reason I do descriptives well, but then again, with them, it's not that hard*g*

Danielle

alinewrites May 15 2003, 11:01:55 UTC

Very hot and lovely! Such a passionate kiss! And the last words are just what we needed.

frooshoo May 15 2003, 11:40:52 UTC

Well Aline, I think that Icon kind of says it all really*g* I just wanted to elaborate on how Chris was feeling then, and well I had always wished that we could have seen just a tad more of that scene, it was great, as is, but I would have loved to have seen Toby say "I missed you" like Chris did when he came back from the hospital after being shot.

Danielle

alinewrites May 15 2003, 12:06:23 UTC

The kiss was much too short. We never knew what happened after, if they could meet again. Happily, fic was there to help ;)
The expression on Chris' face... sigh. To me, it's the best kiss of all.

frooshoo May 15 2003, 12:12:41 UTC

That expression, when Chris turns around and can't believe what he is seeing, I love that, oh that killed me.

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rowanfairchild May 16 2003, 07:41:46 UTC

You know, I seriously wouldn't have minded if the entire series had ended on that note. *sigh*
-R

frooshoo May 16 2003, 07:50:28 UTC

Believe me, Rowan, I wouldn't have minded it either.

Danielle

catheights May 16 2003, 12:02:35 UTC

That added bit of dialogue is perfect. I wish he had said that. You capture the emotions of that scene very well, and give it a little more closure than the original scene had. Very nice.

frooshoo May 16 2003, 13:36:39 UTC

Cat, thank you so much for liking this, you know I really loved that scene, but I so wished he had said it too.

maverick4oz May 23 2003, 20:01:40 UTC

Love how you set the scene. And the "I missed you" at the end just makes me tingle. Great Stuff. Oh and I love the new shoulder icons. Mmmmmmmm.