HT100 Challenge #6-Just Like Heaven

[frooshoo]

Okay, I’ll admit it, I had to edit this down from 163 words, and believe me it was hard to decide what had to go.*g

Comments

[snarkhunt]

oh I love the image of Chris breathing Toby's name, there's something about that that gets to me. Lovely emotional scene, Danielle, I like the idea of just exploring a feeling.

[frooshoo]

Thanks Eliza, there was much more to this I really did have to edit it down. I like showing Chris' feelings, plus there was a tidbit of slash, Toby had just finished doing something to him....hmmm...I wonder what that could be*g*

[lisacali]

"Chris never really believed it existed until he met Toby, or more to the point, until he let Toby in, into that place in his soul where no one else ever had access."

Awww, this is such a sweet, touching moment...*very* nice.

[frooshoo]

I try*g*

[alinewrites]

IMO,you left the best part. "exhilaration of pure love" sigh. Yes. I love that.

[frooshoo]

Oh I couldn't leave that out, actually there was more to that sentence, but that part had to stay, because despite what happened I still believe that Chris felt pure love for Toby.

[rowanfairchild]

*I'd* like to see what got let go. No law says you can't expand this for other purposes... *g*

-R

[frooshoo]

Oh Rowan, now I wish I had saved those changes, but I can tell you that it was more along the lines of how Toby made him feel, that state of Nirvana, bliss, that he had never experienced before, not with any of his ex-wives, not even Bonnie, and no amount of drugs made him feel the way that Toby did, an all natural high. Now the seed has been planted maybe a little expansion could be in order*g*

[rowanfairchild]

Ohhhh! Danielle -- save your drafts! You never know when something, even a good line you don't have a current home for, a description, anything --will be just exactly what you need somewhere down the line.
-R

[frooshoo]

I know I should have, usually I do, this one time I didn't, and now I'm kicking myself, well I'll just add that to the list, I swear that list is growing and growing*g*

[maverick4oz]

Only Toby gave him that rush, that exhilaration of pure love

This is wonderful Danish. (bg) I love the above line because we all know that Chris lives for the rush and for him to find it it Toby is just sooooooo right.

[frooshoo]

Thank you Mav!! His love for Toby is a good rush, that joy, that feeling of just being near Toby, it fuels Chris. See, I just wish they had showed just a tad more of that*g*