Comments | hardtime100: Hardtime Challenge #3 (?): Voyeurism. "Watchful Eye"

serialkeller in hardtime100

Hardtime Challenge #3 (?): Voyeurism. "Watchful Eye"

Apr 18, 2003 21:49

It can't be later than midnight, but he can already tell he won't be getting any sleep before morning. His eyes are riveted to this evening's floor show ( Read more... )

ch 003 voyeur, w: serialkeller

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maverick4oz April 18 2003, 22:53:30 UTC

The dark figure, barely visible against Em City's shadowy corners begins stroking the creamy skin; negative to positive, coal to cream. A last look upward, a turn, an acquiescence, then a traitor tongue, snaking out to meet its match

Amazing imagery Trasker. AMAZING. And woo-hoo, you've popped your HARDTIME cherry. Welcome to the club, baby.

Thanks! serialkeller April 20 2003, 12:55:56 UTC

And it wasn't even as scary as i thought it would be. I actually found it got me in the mood to write other stuff. Thanks for the compliment-- this was a great idea, Mav.

alinewrites April 20 2003, 05:59:47 UTC

"And why he's harder than he's ever been."

Mmmhhh. I like that. Great story, Trasker!

serialkeller April 20 2003, 12:57:15 UTC

Is it totally slutty of me that that line was the first thing i wrote? ;)

catheights April 20 2003, 17:02:52 UTC

Excellent drabble. Such great imagery and tone captured in a few words.

rowanfairchild April 22 2003, 06:02:45 UTC

Tras-ker! Loved this -- economical, yet descriptive enough that we don't need any names to completely visualize the scene and all its players. Glad you're here!
-R

serialkeller April 28 2003, 10:44:37 UTC

Thanks so much for the compliment! I'm really glad to be able to share the stage with all these fabulous writers.

hypertwink June 6 2003, 01:23:09 UTC

My eyes, my eyes! It's Slutty!Beecher with Mondo...*ugh* Great imagery, though.