HT100 Flash Fiction Challenge #7 - Lit Up

[rileyc]

Portions of this actually incorporate some material from what I had in mind for Rowan's "The Plot Thickens" challenge, and include this as a visual ref: a locale employed.

Beta'd by Mav (any goofs are entirely my own), who also supplied the title.

So, it's a June evening in 1997, and fate steps in to give things a kick a butt...

Comments

[actizera]

Well, I already told you this last night, but I'll say it again: it boggles my mind that you wrote all this in the amount of time that elapsed between the last two chats we had! *g* If I had to pick a favorite part, I think it would be the first three paragraphs, which perfectly set up the whole story with a dark, noirish, feeling. Really, just awesome!

[rileyc]

Well, major portions of it were already written, in my head, so that made it easier to pull together. Since I know how much you love your noir, I'm taking this think it would be the first three paragraphs, which perfectly set up the whole story with a dark, noirish, feeling as a tremendous compliment. Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[maverick4oz]

I nodded again and indulged my curiosity: pushing the sleeve of his t-shirt up so I could see all of the black ink decorating his upper arm. "Did you get that to feel humble?"

He turned to face me, smiled. "Not exactly. Toby..."

Ok, you know how much I love this in all it's noirish goodness, but I adore this exchange above because it's such a subtle twist on what we know from canon. I also love how you let slip little clues that things aren't what they appear to be. Harvard, etc. Just a wonderfully crafted, stylish piece.

[rileyc]

Thank you, I wanted to do something that motel, it was just too good to let it slip away. That little moment came out of nowhere, though, but the nod to canon was too good to resist. Always trust the muses, right? :)

[slip_f18]

"I still want to know." I followed him, turned him to face me. "Are you my guardian angel?"

That made him smile, a softer and more intimate version of that powerhouse grin, sadness lingering in his eyes. "I wish."

Oh, I wish too. This story *got me* at so many points. Like the one above. And this one:

He was tall and dark and beautiful, and I could always blame the martinis for the way I took note of the snug fit of his blue jeans.

So good. As always :)

[rileyc]

Thank you, Diane. It's always good to explore some angsty moments with these boys. Glad you enjoyed it.

P.S. Hope you're reading safe and sound and high and dry.

[rowanfairchild]

Mmmm! Moody, mysterious, and just plain yum! Really nice job capturing the noir feel -- and I'm with Actizera on how wonderful the opening is, downright cinematic in the way it sets up the later events.

[rileyc]

Wow, thank you for that. It's always hard to tell if a scene is coming across as visually desired, so it's great when everything does come together like that. This was a fun one.

[ozit]

I love it!

[rileyc]

Thank you.