Comments | hanuueshe: Why the hell not?

hanuueshe

Why the hell not?

Nov 03, 2009 17:07

Pick a paragraph (or any passage less than 500 words) from any fanfic I've written, and comment to this post with that selection. I will then give you a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the character's heads, why I chose certain words, what this moment means ( Read more... )

writing ideas, i r dumb, fanfic

Comments 6

lefaym November 6 2009, 03:16:02 UTC

Do you have a master fic list, or a tag only for your fic?

hanuueshe November 6 2009, 03:30:53 UTC

I've got a ridiculously tagged community, deraliaearth.

Is that why people aren't responding?

lefaym November 6 2009, 03:42:02 UTC

It may well be -- I had no idea where to look!

Anyway, I'll ask you about all of Theory/Practice, since I don't think it's much longer than 500 words:

It had started out so well. Jack had put the contacts on in the club’s bathroom, the jeans and button-down shirt he’d put on to look normal seeming exotic to Ianto’s eyes. He’d winked into the mirror, mouthing “Here we go.”: words Ianto only understood because of the lip reading software ( ... )

hanuueshe November 7 2009, 17:41:16 UTC

Well, this is something I wrote for the fail!sex pornathon, hence the fail!sex. Also, I can see the contacts not really working out very well, especially if the person using them was orally fixated. You aren't exactly looking at anything money-shot worthy when you're giving someone a hickey, are you?

Mostly, I wanted to make this a sort of "everything that can go wrong, will" story. So, I thought, what would the lip reading software make of sex noises.

Then I spent about ten minutes debating writing several variations on the word GUH before I decided that neither the reader nor Ianto would have the patience for that. From there on in, it was a lot of me figuring out "okay, so if your mouth is there, what would you likely be looking at?" and Jack closing his eyes at the end was just icing on the cake.

blue_fjords November 10 2009, 15:53:39 UTC

Late question! But I really liked your Lisa in this (from "Three-Edged Sword"):

And what would happen to the life she was planning on having with Ianto? Would he leave Torchwood when she was better? Or leave her? Or try and remain loyal to both out of some misguided sense of duty? Would she look into his eyes one day in the far future and see that he was no longer trying to hide his resentment?

THE CYBERMEN WILL REMOVE LOVE.

Lisa felt her chest expand again, drawing in the oxygen that her body needed to remain alive. There was no thought process involved, not even in the most primal of her neural centers. She couldn’t slow her breathing down, or speed it up. She couldn’t hold it in. She just kept on breathing, no matter what she wanted.

hanuueshe November 16 2009, 04:07:07 UTC

I... like Cyberwoman more as a concept than as an actual episode. Hence pretty much that entire fic ( ... )