Comments | hansbekhart: Rat's Alley (FMA, Roy/Ed)

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Rat's Alley (FMA, Roy/Ed)

Sep 21, 2006 00:45

Title: Rat's Alley
Author: hansbekhart
Rating: NC-17
Summary: Roy and Ed, in an alleyway. Sounds really meaningful, don't it?
Notes: shored gave me Gasoline, Kleptomania, Flashlight, and this is what my brain came up with: alleyway!porn. I think I got gasoline in there, in some abstract sort of way. Thanks as always to her for holding my hand and hammering ( Read more... )

fma, fanfiction

Comments 26

heidi_mayer September 22 2006, 17:03:58 UTC

That was just mind-blowing. War and sex all mixed together... I had no idea it could turn on so much.
Brigadier General Shit was at his best, as usual.. God, what a man... Fucking Ed in the alley with explosions going off a street away and still making him beg for it.

hansbekhart September 22 2006, 17:25:24 UTC

Ahahaha, Roy is SUCH a pimp. I was chatting with my friend while I wrote this, and half of what I said to her was Roy is SUCH A PIMP OMG. Thank you so much!

chrstphrl September 26 2006, 17:13:57 UTC

God this is gorgeous! And HOT. Did I say HOT?

hansbekhart September 27 2006, 00:44:52 UTC

Well, I dunno, I'm not really sure if you thought it was HOT or not. Did you? You did, right? :D Thanks so much for reading!

threeonetwo September 27 2006, 01:32:18 UTC

That...was wow. Best smut I've ever read. You wrote them perfectly. That and war + smut = two best fic topics in existence. Therefore, both in one fic = instant win. That, and the writing was just...wow.

hansbekhart September 27 2006, 16:39:23 UTC

Ahaha, awww, thank you! It does me good to hear that, because there's certainly smut that I've written that I've been way happier with. I'm really glad you enjoyed it!

rainjoyous September 27 2006, 19:00:16 UTC

Finally got to read this. Very glad I did ^^

Obviously with the hot. And - alley!sex, well, hee . . . I love the sense that for all the power-play going on you don't, actually, know who's 'winning' at any given moment, and at the end they're so very obviously on equal terms . . . very them. Very cool. I loved =)

Thank you ^^

hansbekhart September 28 2006, 00:45:40 UTC

Better late than never, right? :D Glad you ended up reading it - actually, the power play aspect of it was fairly hard, and I ended up throwing away the middle sections and rewriting them almost entirely, to better reflect that equality at the end. Glad that you enjoyed that part and thanks so much for reading!

orion117 October 24 2006, 20:10:24 UTC

This is excellent. Their desparation jumps off of the page, and adds to the intensity of the sex. Ed trusts Roy enough to dump all of his rage on him, and Roy turns it right around on him.

It took me awhile to find this, but I'm glad I did.

orion117 October 24 2006, 20:13:16 UTC

I meant to add that your descriptive passages are very vivid, and make the story that much more powerful.

hansbekhart October 25 2006, 09:15:14 UTC

Aww, thank you so much :). FMA isn't my first fandom, so I tred a little warily when I'm working with (have been bullied towards haha) the characters, but the desperation and the power play between them is one of the most interesting things about their relationship, isn't it? I'm really glad that you enjoyed it, and thanks so much for commenting!