The 12 Days of Arashi - Day 2 - Ohmiya

[hannahkins93]

Time for Day 2 of The 12 Days of Arashi!

Sorry it's almost the end of day to post it!

Enjoy!

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Comments

[yumn_yumi]

And I love them.
That must be the best christmas present ever for Kazu. ^ - ^
Looking forward for the next too

[hannahkins93]

Hehe Thank you! :D

Need to write the next one today!
Got lots to do!

[naoki_hikari]

It's a short oneshot but you prove that short doesn't mean it's crap, I love this one! Lol it's nice of you to added the bed scene too.
So the moral of the day, do not take abstience from sex with you lovers least you have sex like bunnies like a christen for newlywed's house. And having to clean it again later. Lollinggggg

Thanks you!

[hannahkins93]

Ahh! Thank you!
I was worried people would think it was too short or something.

Glad you like it so much!
I had to have the sex in there as well. Hehe

Yes, but Kazu and Satoshi do it like bunnies all the time anyway. HaHa!
Cleaning up after themselves is funny.

Glad you like it! :D
Thank you!

[eve_aida]

I'd get worried like ohno if i know I'm the only one without present when the others already got what nino seemed to wish for. i thought at first nino mad at him because ohno didnt get him any present xD

[hannahkins93]

Yeah, I would have been worried as well.
Nah, Nino was just mad because he thought Ohno had lost interest in him and didn't love him anymore.

Ohno is such a worry wort! :D

Hehe happy couple in the end though!

Thank you!

[hannahkins93]

Nope. Nothing will ever replace their love. :D

Thank you!

[gambitsfox]

I thought this was a wonderful one shot. Loved it! Well written too (I only saw one, maybe two mistakes) so don't worry too much on that......your doing great. : )

[hannahkins93]

Ahh! Thank you!
So glad you think so!
My main worry is messing everything up and these all being rubbish so thank you! :D

(Could you point the mistakes out so I know for the future? Please)

[gambitsfox]

Ok, I'm hardly a picky reader and a few mistakes is really a joy compared to a lot of writers who have many more.
"Damn it!" Satoshi says looking like his going to cry. Should be he is going to cry.
When he's whipping the tears from Satoshi instead of wiping the tears away.
Course I'm no English major but I'm not too bad. Lol! I think a lot of people get so caught up trying to get the story or thought out before it's lost that mistakes are common. Like I said.....I'm not picky and I do read some very badly written stories but yours are great. Don't worry too much if you have a few mistakes......I've made many more. : )

[hannahkins93]

Ah! Right! :D I'll go edit it now. Thank you so much!

I am strongly dyslexic and writing is not my strong point so any help is greatly appreciated. :)