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danang1970 August 18 2011, 06:15:49 UTC
Oh! When I started reading this part, I was afraid that this story would break my heart. Luckily, you squished it back together again just in time. :P I'd love to see BA and Face's reactions to what happened, but this is just beautiful either way. Short and sweet. Thanks so much for writing.

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handwithquill August 18 2011, 20:55:20 UTC
Thanks for saying it was beautiful, but I just reread it and saw how many tyops there are. I should know better then posting something right away that I write at 1:30am.

But a question, if you don't mind, did you like the written out memories that were more like flashbacks or the short bits of memories I managed to do in the first part?

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danang1970 August 19 2011, 01:39:59 UTC
I think they both worked perfectly the way they were used. In the first part, the little snippets of memories let us readers know the highlights/vital bits of information. By the last part, I was really eager to see more from the past (pre-movie and during that eight year period) to see how things had evolved and arrived at the present moment. It was incredibly effective, in my opinion. Teasing at first then bigger scenes further down the line.

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