SPN Fic: And If I Say to You Tomorrow (Gen)

[hanasyoubu]

Title: And If I Say to You Tomorrow
Category: Gen
Rating: G
Characters: Dean Winchester, Sam Winchester
Word Count: 1100
Related Episode: 2X20 What Is and What Should Never Be SPOILERS
Summary: A series of missing-scene drabbles/double-drabbles for the episode.
Disclaimer: Not mine. Highly unlikely they’d ever be.
A/N: I’m trying to climb over

Comments

[jasmasson]

Very nice.

[hanasyoubu]

Thanks! Glad to hear you like it!

[embroiderama]

Oh, lovely. I love Dean needing the reinforcement of the jerk/bitch ritual.

[hanasyoubu]

Thanks for reading!

That was one of the moments (among 597 others) in the episode that hit me very hard. It was funny then really sad and it was such a well-written well-acted one too. I just thought Dean deserved to have a corresponding bitch/jerk moment in reality that reinforced his relationship with Sam. :)

[phoenix_bellamy]

I love fics from 2.20 that have Sam's POV...Very nice one indeed, thanks for writing and sharing ^_^!

[hanasyoubu]

Thanks for reading!

Yeah, me too! I loved loved loved the writing for this episode and it's really too bad, even though totally understandable, that it didn't have enough room to show some of Sam's POV. We need more fics on that! :)

[iamstealthyone]

Very nicely done. I like all of the different moments you created. There’s a wonderful rhythm here.

Favorite lines:

Restless idle like air before a storm

Great analogy.

Dean’s fine. Sam will find him and Dean will be fine.

Such simple, straightforward words, and yet you can clearly feel Sam’s fear. Nice.

When the words finally run out, bleed dry, he says, "I'm here."

"I know, Sammy."

Aww. Love this. So much communicated in so few words.

“Now drink up.”

“No.”

Sometimes, he forgets that Dean can do an excellent impression of a three-year-old throwing a fit.

LOL!

He sits against the headboard on his brother’s bed, a hand’s span between them. Within touch. Standing guard.

Gorgeous ending image.

[hanasyoubu]

Thank you! It's always a pleasure to hear you like it! :)

When the words finally run out, bleed dry, he says, "I'm here."
"I know, Sammy."

So much communicated in so few words.
I think those last two lines were the first lines written for this one. They're my favourite. :) It's just such a lovely idea to imagine the brothers lying in their own bed in the dark, and Dean slowly confesses to Sam what their other lives were like. I really like that image. I'm not completely happy with the execution of this one, and might go back to redo it at some point. Yeah.

And the idea of Ackles doing a three-year-old fit-throwing face amuse me way way more than it's supposed to be, but I've made my peace about that. HEE. It could be worse.

Thanks for reading!

PS. Oh oh. I love the format you use for feedbacks. It's great! So I'll be stealing it and do my feedbacks like that too from now on, for my mid-year resolution of doing at least one feedback a day. I hope you don't mind! :)

[iamstealthyone]

I think those last two lines were the first lines written for this one. They're my favourite. :)

Interesting that those lines came to you so early in the writing process. They're lovely. :)

And the idea of Ackles doing a three-year-old fit-throwing face amuse me way way more than it's supposed to

*g*

PS. Oh oh. I love the format you use for feedbacks. It's great! So I'll be stealing it and do my feedbacks like that too from now on, for my mid-year resolution of doing at least one feedback a day. I hope you don't mind! :)

I don't mind at all. I started doing feedback like this because when I got back into writing fanfic, someone gave me this kind of feedback and I really liked it.

[sophiap]

I adore this. It's lovely to see what was going on in Sam's head during all of this.

The "Bitch," "Jerk" exchange had me choking up.

[hanasyoubu]

Thank you! Glad to hear you like it! :)

It's a shame that they couldn't, understandably, fit more of Sam's POV in the episode. It'd have been very interesting to see how Sam reacted throughout!