Comments | halfshellvenus: LJ Idol Season 11: "The Forgotten Promise"

halfshellvenus

LJ Idol Season 11: "The Forgotten Promise"

Oct 07, 2019 16:57

The Forgotten Promise
idol season 11 | week 2 | 430 words
Living rent-free in your headx-x-x-x-x ( Read more... )

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Comments 35

watching_ships October 8 2019, 00:14:20 UTC

Oooh, I love this.

halfshellvenus October 8 2019, 00:59:16 UTC

Thank you!

I have had this dream, and its near cousins, SO many times. I thought about just writing the unending 'running from mystery-monster' nightmare, but I wanted to include the more intriguing 'forgotten secret places' repeating dream, too. I am really familiar with both of them. :O

So glad you enjoyed this!

kittenboo October 8 2019, 01:43:02 UTC

I really like this!

halfshellvenus October 9 2019, 23:44:29 UTC

Thank you so much!

bleodswean October 8 2019, 15:50:24 UTC

I love your last stanza because YES! Why are some dreams so formulaicly similar??? A poem from you is FUN, K!

halfshellvenus October 9 2019, 23:47:48 UTC

I think many of what we think of as recurring dreams, apart from the ones about flying, are anxiety dreams. And they ARE really similar. I have several about unpreparedness or loneliness that tend to show up around certain themes like the radio station, or college. That's a context my brain understands.

The ones where I'm biking around miles and miles of weird terrain (such as, building are in the middle of my biking route, and now I have to navigate around a pool or up a ladder or through the art room (!))... I have no explanation for what that's all about.

I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. I like to stretch a little early in the season. :)

favoritebean October 8 2019, 16:26:10 UTC

Delightfully creepy! I often wonder if my cats appear as monsters to the flies and lizards they chase.

halfshellvenus October 10 2019, 00:04:21 UTC

I'm sure they do-- and possibly an unknown monster. For the lizards, they may only get one chance to wonder what the heck that monster is. :O

Our new kitty actually caught a fly he was chasing about a month ago. We were amazed-- especially because he may be blind in one eye. :O

pixiebelle October 9 2019, 03:01:19 UTC

I liked that you wrote it in second person. It worked well for this, and really made me feel it. Well done!

halfshellvenus October 10 2019, 00:05:12 UTC

I'm glad you liked the second person choice. It seemed fitting, given that this is the kind of dream most of us have had, possibly many times over. :O