Comments | halfshellvenus: Supernatural 50-States Gen Fanfiction: Restless Spirits, 2/2

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Supernatural 50-States Gen Fanfiction: Restless Spirits, 2/2

Aug 01, 2006 21:34

Title: Restless Spirits 2/2
Author: HalfshellVenus
Characters: Sam and Dean (Gen), a story in two chapters.
Rating: PG
Summary: Some arguments are never finished, especially those between Winchesters.
Author’s Notes: Written for my Oregon entry to spn_50states. I couldn’t begin to touch on all the parts I wanted to, but I hope a feeling for the state comes ( Read more... )

50states, my_fic, sn_gen, oregon_fic

Comments 40

katbcoll August 2 2006, 16:33:24 UTC

Wow... I wanna pack up the car and drive north. *G* This was a wonderful journey.

Everyone has hit on the high points, so I'll just tell you this: I loved every word. Thank you.

halfshellvenus August 3 2006, 03:53:08 UTC

Wow... I wanna pack up the car and drive north. *G* This was a wonderful journey.
Yay! My love for my home state came through! :D

I loved every word. Thank you.
That says it all, right there. I'm so glad you liked it! :)

deirdre_c August 2 2006, 20:21:28 UTC

Great job, hon! Best non-Wincestous single bed scene EVER!

Also,
“There’s a pair of Mouse ears waiting with your name on them,” Sam said softly.
SCORE!!!!!

halfshellvenus August 3 2006, 03:56:57 UTC

Great job, hon! Best non-Wincestous single bed scene EVER!
:D Thank you! There was even plottiness, but I hope not too heavy-handed. And my 6'4" husband slept in that exact bed. NOT comfortably, for the same reasons Sam is having problems.

“There’s a pair of Mouse ears waiting with your name on them,” Sam said softly.
SCORE!!!!!
Hah! I saw that, as I was trying madly to catch up on my f-list today. It's in my ginormous "TO READ" memory section, along with most of the 50-states fics from my f-list. Writing the "Shadows" stuff and this at the same time was kind of a disaster. :0

tyrical August 3 2006, 00:17:37 UTC

“When did you learn to work inside Dad’s framework?”

“When I had to stop caring about his approval.”

This is a great moment. Loved it! Such a simple, direct, loving statement. Said by Sam with no expectations other than to give something to his brother that just might allow him to live a life outside of the very tight box he has drawn himself into.

:snuggles: On you lots and lots.

halfshellvenus August 3 2006, 04:04:41 UTC

Said by Sam with no expectations other than to give something to his brother that just might allow him to live a life outside of the very tight box he has drawn himself into.
It's a huge moment for ANY child who cannot please their parents to realize that there is strength in no longer trying. Sam got there earlier, because he always knew he couldn't make John happy. But Dean... lives with the idea that "almost good-enough" or "mostly-good" is something he can do better/more often and it keeps him tied to John's every mood.

And how perceptive that you picked that part out-- it winds up the underlying themes that just barely surface again and again in this story (they way they do through so many random conversations on the show).

Thank you, tyrical. ♥

iamstealthyone August 3 2006, 04:15:06 UTC

“Wow,” Sam said. “I never thought I’d hear you of all people talk about thinking outside the box.”

Dean frowned. Sam could be such a jackass when he was short on sleep.

This was nice, the little bit of monster mixed in with the relationship stuff. And the ending was very cute. *g*

Favorite lines:

“And a guy who runs away to do what everyone else is doing isn’t exactly a master at thinking outside the box,” he added.

“The box is whatever you’re used to Dean. I got out of the Winchester box.”

“You call it a box, I call it family.”

This kind of hurt to read. They really know how to push each other’s buttons. And that last line? *hugs Dean*

“Man, that is the ugliest hyena I’ve ever seen,” Sam said. “No wait-that’s it, isn’t it? God, the drawings in Dad’s journal suck.”

LOL!

Sam let out the breath he’d been holding. “So what do we do with it now?” He caught sight of a manic grin forming on Dean’s face, and overrode him immediately. “We’re not burning it.”ROTFLOL! Yeah, Dean’s just a wee bit fond of burning things, isn’t he? Our ( ... )

halfshellvenus August 3 2006, 06:28:20 UTC

This kind of hurt to read. They really know how to push each other’s buttons. And that last line? *hugs Dean*
They definitely do, whether they mean to or not. That pattern is too old to be avoided unless they try.

I'm glad you liked the line about the drawings in John's journal. The Chupacabra research I did for this story was mystifying. Lots of conflicting accounts (of course :D), so what DOES one look like? I'm guessing whatever the answer is, John drew it in the journal personally. ;)

ROTFLOL! Yeah, Dean’s just a wee bit fond of burning things, isn’t he? Our little pyro.
:D There's the fact that it solves a lot of problems, but on top of that I think Dean just likes burning stuff a lot. If it weren't so loud that people would notice, he'd probably like blowing stuff up even better. :0

I definitely think Dean needs to be more assertive with John, and we did finally see him getting that way by end of season one. And it’s thanks to Sam. Sam’s been good for Dean on that front. The only way TO get someone to stop taking you for ( ... )

iamstealthyone August 3 2006, 13:40:39 UTC

The Chupacabra research I did for this story was mystifying. Lots of conflicting accounts (of course :D), so what DOES one look like?

I ran into the same problem when I researched chupacabras for a story I wrote. Several versions of what they look like popped up, which actually is kind of cool, because then you can take the features you like best and work with them. *g*

There's the fact that it solves a lot of problems, but on top of that I think Dean just likes burning stuff a lot. If it weren't so loud that people would notice, he'd probably like blowing stuff up even better. :0

ITA.

That scene in-- Salvation was it?-- where John runs into them again and immediately digs into Dean about the state of the car... the look on Sam's and Dean's faces turned that scene into a completely different direction, like Sam is used to John piling crap on Dean as well as on him. And it occurred to me that maybe some of Sam's anger toward John is actually on Dean's behalf, not just for himself.Definitely an interesting idea to ponder, and I'm ( ... )

northface11 August 3 2006, 17:22:15 UTC

I have to say, the line about the signs being there to warn motorists about random cows? Made me laugh out loud. I dunno...

The Oregon Trail bit reminded me instantly of grade three, playing the computer game on black and green screens... Good times.

I loved the thinking outside the box bit, and Sam's thoughts on the bed-sharing, because those two things, and the motivations behind them, really do sum up the boys' lives.

halfshellvenus August 4 2006, 05:58:23 UTC

the line about the signs being there to warn motorists about random cows? Made me laugh out loud. I dunno...
This actually happened to us when we drove up that Highway. We saw the warning signs (which have always meant "maybe"), and when we rounded a corner an entire herd was on the freakin' highway. And none too bothered by us, either. :0

because those two things, and the motivations behind them, really do sum up the boys' lives.
Both their conflicts and their bonds, even though they are horribly bad at dealing with things directly. Indirectly seems to work better for them.

Thanks so much for your wonderful comments, and I'm so glad you liked the story (and its setting). :)