Comments | halfshellvenus: Supernatural Gen Fiction: "With No End In Sight" (Mystery Spot, PG)

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Supernatural Gen Fiction: "With No End In Sight" (Mystery Spot, PG)

Sep 23, 2009 22:50

Title: With No End In Sight
Author: HalfshellVenus
Characters: Sam, Dean (Gen)
Rating: PG
Summary (3x11, "Mystery Spot): Sam lost Dean again today…Author's Notes: This was originally written for a friend's birthday, an experiment in poetry that I'd hoped would be a drabble on "Repetition." I can't force it down to 100 words without losing its ( Read more... )

spn_s3_fic, my_fic, sn_gen, poem

Comments 25

gunznammo2 September 24 2009, 13:25:56 UTC

Oh, Sam! And this: '...of always missing Dean even when he's sitting right there.' With that horrible lesson under his belt, the path he took distanced himself even more. I just want the brothers united again. Hurt..alot. Thank you, hon.

halfshellvenus September 24 2009, 18:59:14 UTC

I just want the brothers united again.
Me too-- permanently, and with themselves emotionally "present" for all of it.

tsuki_no_bara September 24 2009, 15:01:48 UTC

i like how circular this is - "the world tips back over to the beginning" - but man, it is so sad. :(

halfshellvenus September 24 2009, 19:01:19 UTC

i like how circular this is - "the world tips back over to the beginning"

I couldn't find a good way to get circle/ciruit/loop into the title, but that was definitely the idea behind all of this. At this point in Sam's life, that loop is painful and it feels infinite, when all he wants is Dean back again for real and to just have it stop.

The show went for the humor after awhile in that episode, but from Sam's perspective none of that was EVER funny, not for a single second. *sniffle*

dreamlittleyo September 24 2009, 15:20:48 UTC

ooooh, interesting format and gorgeously done! I loved this!

halfshellvenus September 24 2009, 19:03:40 UTC

Thank you! I'd hoped the poetry part of it would be more, well, poetic, but it's been so long since I did poetry that this is really too free-form for that.

Still, all the thoughts I wanted are there, in all their punishing truth. Poor Sam-- how heartbreaking, hopeless, and lonely all of that would have been. :(

devon99 September 24 2009, 18:17:19 UTC

Completely loved this. I love to write poetry and to see you writing in this format made me squee. Fab as always:)

halfshellvenus September 24 2009, 19:05:01 UTC

I wish it were better AS poetry, but I haven't done poetry in ages (except for something cracktastic for win_noncon), and I'm kind of rusty.

That's why this one's only being posted to the f-list, but I'm glad some of you are enjoying it! :)

brigid_tanner September 24 2009, 23:52:19 UTC

Ow! that hurt. In a good way. It's beautiful.

halfshellvenus September 25 2009, 00:50:18 UTC

After "Mystery Spot," when I think of SPN and repetition it always comes back to this.

And oh, the unending agony of it all for Sam. :(