Comments | halfshellvenus: Prison Break Fiction: "Hope Aloft On The Wind" (Gen or Slash, PG)

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Prison Break Fiction: "Hope Aloft On The Wind" (Gen or Slash, PG)

Feb 26, 2009 12:18

Title: Hope Aloft On The Wind
Author: HalfshellVenus
Characters: Lincoln and Michael (Gen or Slash)
Rating: PG
Summary (Pre-series): After leaving prison, Lincoln searches for a sense of who he still is.
Author's Notes: For clair_de_lune's birthday, and her request for Michael and Lincoln and something soft and warm.
Also for fanfic100, this is "Air."

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( Nothing was the same inside prison... )

pb_slash, ml_slash, my_fic, ml_gen, fanfic100, birthday, pb_gen

Comments 10

happywriter06 February 26 2009, 22:44:21 UTC

*adjusts slash colored glasses* Very nice. I think my favorite part though is the opening. The way you describe life on the inside really gives the reader a feel for what it's like.

halfshellvenus March 2 2009, 02:46:30 UTC

I really miss those in-prison days, if for no other reason than for the richness of how different everything is from regular life.

Though it's nice to be grateful when you're out and you know you've got it good now. :)

clair_de_lune February 26 2009, 23:00:25 UTC

I love the mood of the piece, how the story itself feels soft and warm (and in contrast, the grittiness of the first paragraph). Reading this, I can't help thinking of what's coming for Lincoln, and yet it doesn't seem to matter that much, maybe because the fic is so peaceful and hopeful that I cannot not believe everthing isn't going to be okay.

Special love for these lines:
Lincoln had never liked being dependent on anyone else for his happiness.
This was the constant truth in both their lives: even when things got so bad that Lincoln had utterly lost all hope, Michael would somehow still be living it.
How could he still miss something he'd hardly even had?

And even though my slash oriented mind reads the ending in a certain way *g* it does work either as gen or as slash, which is nice. I enjoy the ambiguity/subtlety here.

Thanks so much :)

halfshellvenus March 2 2009, 02:50:11 UTC

how the story itself feels soft and warm (and in contrast, the grittiness of the first paragraph).
I'm glad to hear that, because I wanted your prompts to be felt in the story's mood as well as directly in some of the things that happen.

And though it will eventually go wrong for Lincoln later, sad to say, at least for now he has the hope of escaping being the guy who keeps bringing that on himself.

And even though my slash oriented mind reads the ending in a certain way *g* it does work either as gen or as slash, which is nice. I enjoy the ambiguity/subtlety here.
It does for me too-- I wrote it with slashy intent, but where it finished was as a story that could really be either. Apart from everything else, Lincoln is out and he has Michael again, and he can enjoy the luxury of spending time with him and not having arbitrary deadlines cutting things short. And at least for the moment, he has hope that he'll become something better himself. :)

freaky_nea February 28 2009, 23:32:47 UTC

So soft and peaceful and hopeful. Thanks for that. <3

halfshellvenus March 2 2009, 02:51:58 UTC

The "hopeful" part is something I really wanted for this, because those moments have to have been all too rare for Lincoln, and I wanted to curl up in that feeling at least for awhile.

And the chance for Lincoln to realize that Michael succeeds where he fails, simply because Michael perseveres when hope should be gone, was impossible to resist. He borrows a little bit of that hope for himself, seeing the evidence of where it can lead.

Thanks so much for reading!

anonymous March 3 2009, 15:37:45 UTC

aww, you know how to touch hearts!
thank you, couldn't the writers just use these lines to end the series?

halfshellvenus March 3 2009, 20:03:18 UTC

Oh, I wish that the writers (at this point) loved the series the way the fans do!

We lost along the way the whole sense of "family" and why Michael would do such a crazy, desperate thing as going to prison to break out his brother. And we never really got the character background on either brother that I'd hoped we would-- Lincoln has always been far too little explored, and even Michael has been more "labeled" than actually revealed, if that makes sense.

Filling that void is what originally inspired me to begin writing fanfic (for Prison Break, 4 years ago).

I'm glad you think this succeeds in enhancing the show! :)

anonymous March 5 2009, 15:14:18 UTC

I do totally agree with you, they kind of left things hanging, am so glad you took us in the right direction!

and for the previous comment of 'freaky nea', do read your fan fiction as well, and really like it, can't comment to you anonymously though!

halfshellvenus March 5 2009, 18:09:48 UTC

I'm glad you enjoy my stories over all. :)

can't comment to you anonymously though!

You should be able to, if you like-- I don't think any of the entries have anonymous commenting disabled. If they do, it's a mistake!