Comments | halfshellvenus: Prison Break Gen Fiction: Remembering Who We Used To Be (PG)

halfshellvenus

Prison Break Gen Fiction: Remembering Who We Used To Be (PG)

Dec 08, 2005 19:52

Title: Remembering Who We Used To Be
Characters: Michael, Lincoln (Gen)
Prompt: #36, “Smell”
Rating: PG
Author's Notes: Written for the prisonbreak100 fanfic challenge, where I have the Gen pairing of Lincoln and Michael.

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( When Michael asked Lincoln his favorite smell once, Lincoln chose vanilla, because it reminded him of their mother. )

prisonbreak100, my_fic, ml_gen, michael_lincoln, #36, fanfic, pb_gen

Comments 7

thelana December 9 2005, 06:21:56 UTC

I know you try to make this gen, but boy it's not working ;D

Seriously, I love it, also because it's such an important point to ponder, what if Michael saves Linc and Linc is not at all like he expects?

Though that bit about the mother's perfume gave me the funniest mental image of Michael running around with a perfume bottle randomly spraying then on potential love interest girls for sex. (note: that is a good thing, because I like picturing fucked!up!Michael AND it amuses me)

halfshellvenus December 9 2005, 06:36:27 UTC

I know you try to make this gen, but boy it's not working ;D

*thwap!* Take off those slash-glasses! I'm saving the slash stuff for fanfic100 (already have a short piece written).

what if Michael saves Linc and Linc is not at all like he expects?

I think it's inevitable, that Linc will be different. But Michael is somewhat in denial about that.

Actually, regarding the perfume, it's more as if this might be a "lost" scent (i.e., a perfume no-one wears anymore), but he hopes to come across it again someday and remember happier things about his mother. Ever had a smell take you by surprise that way, where you get a sudden flashback to something forgotten (a place, or a feeling even) that happened when you were like, 5?

thelana December 9 2005, 06:40:25 UTC

I think it's inevitable, that Linc will be different. But Michael is somewhat in denial about that.

I know. Just point #3423432 I hope will be addressed by the series some day.

Ever had a smell take you by surprise that way, where you get a sudden flashback to something forgotten (a place, or a feeling even) that happened when you were like, 5?

Not really. I fear I'm not much of a smell person. But I envy people who are.

faithinfaith February 13 2006, 10:45:17 UTC

here you have used another angle that I really like -- the humans ability to remember things when they regocognize a smell. It's interseting and creative and clever. And as usal you but a wonderful touching twist at the end, by adding some angst. It's briliant and I really like it. Another thing I really like with your stories is the pace. Calm, pensive, nothing overdramatically at all and still very touching. Again -- great work!

halfshellvenus February 13 2006, 19:15:42 UTC

The "Smell" prompt is for the prisonbreak100 challenge (100 stories, built around the 100 prompts in the table). When I think of smell, memories is almost the first thing that comes to me. It seemed perfect for this story-- memories both good and bad, and choices that they force in us.

It's true that the pace is usually very, hmmmm, readable, I guess. Not rushed, and the flow should keep you interested and carry you to the next part of the story without the feeling of abruptness or having missed something. (or nodding off in the middle).

Glad you liked this one so well! I always enjoy your comments. :)

tyrical April 14 2006, 03:07:48 UTC

Inside, is Lincoln still Lincoln anymore?

You know I never thought to ask that question.
I wonder is he?
Of course he's different but is he so changed that they wouldn't even be able to relate? Oh the possibilities.

Smell is the strongest trigger for memories. I could see it being a determinging factor in Michael's thought process when trying to gain the strength to keep going.

halfshellvenus April 16 2006, 17:38:47 UTC

Of course he's different but is he so changed that they wouldn't even be able to relate? Oh the possibilities.
The amount of damage prison can do to a person-- Death Row experiences and near-exectution aside-- can change them forever.

I wonder if Michael realizes that it's happening to him, even now. He will not be the same person leaving prison as he was when he went in.