Comments | halfdutch: The Bachelor: Paradise Island, Part 4

halfdutch

The Bachelor: Paradise Island, Part 4

May 16, 2007 15:43

Title: The Bachelor: Paradise Island, Part 4
Pairings: Jack/various women, Jack/Sawyer
Rating: PG-13
Summary: When troubling allegations surface, Jack has to decide whether to send one woman home early
Note: Thanks again to zelda_zee for the beta! There's a little less crack in this chapter, FWIW.

Part 1, Part 2, Part 3

( Jack was going to have to make a list of all the ways he was realizing just what a chump he was. )

lost_fic, jack/sawyer, lost_fic_s3, the bachelor

Comments 35

isis2015 May 16 2007, 23:23:13 UTC

It shouldn't come as a surprise that my favorite parts of this are the moments between Jack and Sawyer. You handled the situation with Kate and her past very well, and it felt true to Jack's character that he wouldn't let that make him send her home, but the moments between Jack and Sawyer were just wonderful. You really feel the attraction growing and the attachment they've begun to form to each other.

I especially love this: Sawyer’s head tipped back, his lips brushing Jack’s ear. ”You’re one of the good ones, Jack. Don’t you let them change that.” He sounded almost angry and Jack shivered. It kinda gives you the feeling that Sawyer may have a vague idea what's going on behind the scenes and he's worried for Jack, worried that he's going to change into a different person because of it. I love what that says about Sawyer's feelings for Jack, and that Jack is beginning to discover his feelings for Sawyer (and his back dimples ;D).

I love this, and I can't wait to see where you take it next. ♥

halfdutch May 17 2007, 02:09:41 UTC

Aww, I love that you love that Jack/Sawyer scene. :) I'm a bit impatient to get their storyline going but it's not the only one I'm dealing with, of course! And I always love Sawyer being protective of Jack and I'm glad you do too.

Very pelased you're still enjoying the ride!

astra2104 May 16 2007, 23:39:03 UTC

Wohoo, the Jack and Sawyer action is on! Yay!

Sawyer’s head tipped back, his lips brushing Jack’s ear. ”You’re one of the good ones, Jack. Don’t you let them change that.” He sounded almost angry and Jack shivered. It was just the puff of Sawyer’s exhalation raising the hairs on the back of his neck, he told himself, not the heat of this body pressing against him, or the strange intensity in Sawyer’s voice.

Awww...I love that. But how will it continue? And what about Kate?
I kinda regret now that I've never watched the show properly, I want to see where you get your inspiration from, lol!
:)

halfdutch May 17 2007, 02:13:24 UTC

Aww, woo for Jack/Sawyer action! ;) And don't worry, there'll be more, only Jack has a few hometowns to visit first!

Hee, I'm very amused that this fic is piquing your interest in real Bachelor! It's a guilty pleasure, definitely, because you're embarrassed for everyone participating but sometimes there are these genuine moments -- but they're surrounded by tons of cheese and awkwardness. This time, I think the bachelor has really fallen in love with one girl and it's very genuine but we shall see. Watching other people getting their heart broken on TV is always going to be uncomfortable! But there *is* tons of cattiness and scheming and absurd declarations of love after a very short time. So much material to work with!

fosfomifira May 16 2007, 23:40:44 UTC

I obviously loved the Jack/Sawyer moments, sleepy!Sawyer is made of the cute (as is Jack noticing his back dimples). The part where drunk!Sawyer trips walking up the staira cracked me up, but what really did it for me was Shannon's interview, cracking up jokes about threesomes. She's such a blast! I miss her so.

And I wouldn't say no to a booty call with those two either, but that's not a surprise, is it?

Loving it :D

halfdutch May 17 2007, 02:15:02 UTC

Back dimple icon! I need to get me one of those! Aww, who doesn't love Sawyer in all his incarnations? And I thought this chapter needed a bit more sass so of course it had to be Shannon! And very perceptive she is too! ;)

demonqueen666 May 16 2007, 23:46:10 UTC

Jack and Sawyer alone time, Jack/Kate/Sawyer subtext of secret angst, and Shannon being, well...Shannon! (plus, bonus appearance by Scott and Steve)

What can I say? I love it :D

halfdutch May 17 2007, 02:16:12 UTC

Hee, I didn't want to bring in *every* Lost character but I figured Scott & Steve would be fun to throw into the mix. And they might censor Shannon but of course we love her the way she is, inappropriateness and all. :)

two_five May 17 2007, 04:33:16 UTC

Ahhhhh! I can't wait until the next part!
:D

halfdutch May 18 2007, 03:46:57 UTC

Currently in progress. *rubs hands together productively*

two_five May 18 2007, 03:51:06 UTC

Ooooooh! Can't wait!! :D