Comments | halfdutch: The Bachelor: Paradise Island, Part 3

halfdutch

The Bachelor: Paradise Island, Part 3

May 13, 2007 18:36

Title: The Bachelor: Paradise Island, Part 3
Pairings: Jack/various women, Jack/Sawyer
Rating: PG
Summary: Jack narrows the field down to four women and a shocking secret is revealed!
Note: Thanks again to zelda_zee for the beta!

Part 1, Part 2

( C’mon, they’ll all love you, Doc. You’re the ultimate ‘take home to Mom,’ guy. )

lost_fic, jack/sawyer, lost_fic_s3, the bachelor

Comments 41

isis2015 May 14 2007, 02:36:03 UTC

I never thought Sun was going to make it to the final four (even though that would have been cool) so I'm not surprised that she didn't. I did like that Jack was broken up about letting her go (as well as his reasons for doing so) and that Sun wasn't really into the whole idea, but being pressured into it by her mother. Very canon.

The ending is creepy. I can't wait to see what happens next. :) I'm so looking forward to when Jack realizes that it's Sawyer he really wants.

halfdutch May 15 2007, 01:19:18 UTC

Glad you approve of the Sun portion! And yes, it is very canon that her mother was trying to get her married off! It's funny just how much dating canon there is to draw on. (And what isn't there, I am, of course, making up out of thin air!)

And Jack is slowly realizing just how much Sawyer means to him. ;)

demonqueen666 May 14 2007, 03:42:03 UTC

Continues to be in-character, show-accurate and made of awesome. For some reason I was cracking up at the part where Ben was whining about no one reading Jack's file...lolz!

I really can't wait to see where you go next with this. The thing about Kate's secret getting revealed at the end? Oooh! And the plot thickens...

halfdutch May 15 2007, 01:21:03 UTC

LOL. The pancake icon! ;)

Hee, I'm glad it's still meeting with your approval. And the plot is definitely thickening!

inthekeyofd May 14 2007, 04:16:36 UTC

I never realized just how much this show could totally fit into the bachelor..and it's totally in character too, that Juliet smirk, the fact that Kate tackles him and of course the fact that he would miss Sun, she really is so demure it may be harder for her to open up to him, and I loved LOVED that Sawyer brought him that tape ( ... )

halfdutch May 15 2007, 01:23:09 UTC

There's a surprising amount of overlap, LOL!

And you know, I love Gabriela too. Jack would have so been better off with her than pining over Sarah. (Whom I deliberately did not put in this fic!)

Jack's going to be kept guessing for a bit who's behind the dirty tricks although you may be onto something there. ;)

And bwah, everyone running after Jack like he's Austin Powers? LOL. I'd like to see that!

alemyrddin May 14 2007, 10:04:17 UTC

he felt a calm serenity from her that he himself was sorely lacking
I think this is why I feel Sun's friendship would be great for Jack, both in canon and fic.

As for the story, you are really building a complex plot here! I love it!
Kate's past revealed, Ben's whining about nobody having read Jack's file (Juliet though, seems to have a very reliable information source...mmmm that's intriguing!)
And of course Jack is going to miss Sawyer... :)
Thank you, keep it going!

halfdutch May 15 2007, 01:25:25 UTC

Awww, I love Sun too. I don't really ship her with Jack but I think they could really complement each other. I just don't ever see a romantic spark there.

And hee, yes, I love to plot! I originally thought of this as a rather short fic but of course the real Bachelor runs for 8 or 9 eps and there's so much going on before it gets to the final rose. And then you add in all the beind-the-scenes stuff here and yeah, we're talking many chapters. Hope I can keep juggling all the plot points well enough until the end!

siluria May 14 2007, 11:29:35 UTC

I just love these, they're fantastic, funny and with so many brilliant character points and nods to the show that I love finding them all. Next part please!!!! :)

halfdutch May 15 2007, 01:25:54 UTC

Aww, thank you, hon. Hope I can keep it all going!