Comments | haearnmouse: Drabble // Bleach // 12th Division

haearnmouse

Drabble // Bleach // 12th Division

Oct 07, 2005 10:49

For :: shinigamikender
Title :: Shadows Within Shadows
Setting :: Bleach
Characters :: Kurotshuchi Mayuri, Kurotshuchi Nemu
Words :: 530
Requirement :: thematic ~ gigai scientists and/or Mayuri and Nemu

( The idiots had never made the connection. )

bleach, drabbles :: open drabble request post

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meallanmouse October 7 2005, 15:41:54 UTC

Yeah. Typical of Mayuri, methinks, too.

Penultimate is a gorgeous word. Oh so much.

First two fixed, but I think I'll keep proof for now. Evidence doesn't quite ring how I want it to, for some reason. Hrm.

(Thank ye! :D)

lily22 October 7 2005, 20:14:06 UTC

Aww... Nemu isn't useless! Mayuri being overconfident and evil but still kind of smart! Everything I've ever hoped for in canon. :)

meallanmouse October 8 2005, 16:51:12 UTC

I heart Nemu. The ones that seem the less developped also just give you such fun writing opportunities it'd be crazy to pass 'em up. ;)

Smart villains = the best, too.

furato October 8 2005, 16:22:28 UTC

I like your Mayuri characterisation... eerie, shady, yet so focused and effective. Can't help picturing his bulging eyes and heartless grin throughout the reading. I also like how you touch the dark side of Soul Society, the authority who keep one eye closed to the heinous deeds carried out under their nose. And I'm totally rooting for Nemu here.

An inconsistency: you use "Sousuke Aizen" and "Kurotsuchi Mayuri" together. Their family names, respectively, are Aizen and Kurotsuchi. It'd be better if you choose one naming order for the fic.

haearnmouse October 8 2005, 16:44:21 UTC

HA! I'm usually more careful than that about the naming scheme. Setting it to the traditional format now for Aizen. XD Thanks! :)

(And yes. I like intelligent villains far more, myself. And ye gods, after the part where Mayuri kills off some of his own men to get to Orihime and Ishida and nothing is done about it you have to admit that the Soul Society powers that be do the turning a blind eye thing. Gyeh!)

donovan_smiley August 1 2006, 20:34:57 UTC

well.. love this Nemu. Can i translate this fic for my friends, please?