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I'm fashionably late. Fashion. Like a fedora. thatsmycouch April 9 2011, 07:41:46 UTC
Hello there! :)

Thank you for threading with me at d_m! Or rather, I suppose I should say thank you for putting up with my poor fledgling muse. I hope I didn't manage to annoy poor Bosco too much. ♥

That said, I wanted to mention that your muse's voice is exceptionally clear. From the chopped manner of speaking to following Jane's lead-in, it was a joy to thread with such a well-developed character.

I hope he's recovered well from his forest-rest! Thanks again, and I hope to see him around. :)

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Re: I'm fashionably late. Fashion. Like a fedora. hadtobe_said April 10 2011, 02:30:20 UTC
Jane's very existence annoys Bosco, so if you did that's a good thing.

You're character isn't fledgling at all; I found his dialogue and narrative to be very in character. I found him very fun to interact with. You're doing a great job with him. I'd love to thread with him with any of my Mentalist muses (Bosco, Kristina or Red John)

Welcome to mentalist_games as well. We haven't done much with it, but you're welcome to use it as a dressing room. At some point I'm going to pull together a case study role play, I think, but I'd love for the com to be used more.

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thatsmycouch April 11 2011, 23:56:26 UTC
Thank you! I'm working hard to get Jane's character down properly, and any feedback is good feedback, as far as writing is concerned.

A case study role play sounds fantastic. I love the idea. I also find it comforting that there's almost a mini-hub for Mentalist lovers in the RP world; it's like finding a warm cup of tea already there for you when you get home. I can't promise I'll always be amazing and perfectly in character, but I can promise that I'll do my best and learn from my mistakes. :)

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