Fic: Judge Not

[h_loquacious]

A/N:  So...  I’ve been catching up on post-finale fic lately.  It makes me nervous.  That finale makes me nervous.  I never really intended to write post-finale anything.  At least not this quickly.  I’m not sure I have everything sorted out in my head yet.  But then this idea sprung up fully formed this afternoon, and I couldn’t stop myself.  I

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[ruby_caspar]

Perfect. This is what I imagine will happen in the next series, what I think Lisbon's reaction will be. Jane will get off, and Lisbon will be so disappointed in him. I thought this was such a wonderful introspective piece, so well done.

[h_loquacious]

Thanks so much! I hope we get to see some of Lisbon's reaction. Not her immediate reaction, that I'm not sure I want to see, but I want to see a shift in the relationship now. Glad you enjoyed this. Thanks for commenting!

[lzod]

very nice piece. I really can't wait for the next season!

[h_loquacious]

Thanks! Glad you liked it. I'm curious about what they're going to do next season now.

[watchyouwalk]

Ooh, I love this! So beautiful and heartbreaking, and sadly realistic. I'd also like to emphasize heartbreaking again - reading, ofc, from Lisbon's POV in such an introspective piece was really tugging at my heartstrings, because I was feeling things along with her, especially when she was reaffirming her decisions to herself (i.e., "You decided (you decided."). And I really just like the premise of the story (short, but sweet), because I can easily picture her struggling very hard not to judge and having to convince herself over and over again that it's okay. I think you painted a really nice picture here (definitely could see this in my head as I was reading), even down to the little things - Jane still being a showman, Lisbon turning away in disappointment, the small references to previous episodes (i.e., "That is his job too. Maybe it will still be enough."). I know this comment is very rambly, but I just had to get my thoughts out. ^^ Thanks for writing this - it really is lovely!

[h_loquacious]

Thanks! It is heartbreaking, but that finale was kind of heartbreaking, especially when you consider it from Lisbon's perspective. You know Lisbon's going to struggle next season, if the writers are competent in any way. I'm glad you liked it. It kind of sprung up in my head fully formed, so I wrote it down. Hee. And no need to apologize for being rambly. I'm rambly myself.

[spyglass_]

This is fantastic. Raw and introspective, and an excellent use of second person.

And I'm really glad I read it with the breaks. I just glanced at it on FFN too, and this just reads better. It feels like it was supposed to feel (or, I think, how you intended it).

[h_loquacious]

Thanks! I've never used the second person before, so that was a bit different. But I think I like it. It does put the finale in some perspective too, which I like. And it is just way better with the breaks. (Still bitter at FFN.)

[fading_ripples]

Oh, this was awesome!

[h_loquacious]

Thanks! Glad you liked it.