Fic: Fraught

[h_loquacious]

So, I’ve been having an odd kind of day. I’ve been feeling antsy, and had the urge to write an argument. They’re fun to write every so often. So that’s what I did. Because I genuinely feel that Jane and Lisbon need to argue a little more often. To be perfectly honest, in some ways, I’m not entirely sure what this is. Thus, feedback would be

Comments

[lzod]

That was good. Even if Jane doesn't see he's just pushing her away by being himself (not giving an inch to anyone) he's going to end up doing that one day & he won't be able to get back into her good graces.

[h_loquacious]

Jane gets tunnel-vision when it comes to Red John and can be an idiot, unfortunately. I'm glad you liked it!

[lilybeth84]

I love how you captured them here. :) Great fic.

[h_loquacious]

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[pene]

I thoroughly enjoyed this. I like the ferocity in both of them and the two and fro of the conversation heating and cooling.

[h_loquacious]

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed the flow of the conversation. I had fun writing it.

[soraya786]

Wow, I think this is amazing! I love how this isn't quite a romance and yet I can still feeeeeel that chemistry between them :D And I think you've done such a fabulous job in creating that chemistry with the dialogue, which is so spot on. I would have loved to see this scene in the episode.

Great job :)

[h_loquacious]

Thanks so much! I was trying to keep the chemistry in the sub-text, so I'm glad that kind of worked. Thanks for the feedback.